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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "When Life was Young"

A Collection of Pain.

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I hold to the knowledge that in the end, God's love will win out which is what has always seen me through the tragedies of this life. Well done and than you very much for sharing it.


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    Thanks Mystic Angel and have an Angelic Day.
    Ricky
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Hi Doctor Ricky! I read this and though you wrote is as non-fiction prose, it really reads more like a poem. I sense that the events of 9/11 had a tremendous impact on your life.


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    An impacted me about as much as anybody from a distance that was watching the horrible events.
    Thanks,
    Ricky
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I enjoy each stanza on their own, I'm not quite sure what to make of them together. I especially enjoyed the last stanza, darkness coming from evil and hate and not the dimming of the stars.


 Comment Written 20-Oct-2019



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    Your welcome.
    Follow me?
    You'll be surprised.
    Doctor Ricky....

reply by Darlene Franklin on 21-Oct-2019
    Ah, you teaser, I might have to do that.
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Powerful words you write. We are moving or perhaps have already moved into a darker period of history. I am troubled by what I see and hear. There is blame enough to spread to all and still I think (maybe hope) that there is still time to turn things around. Perhaps we need to slow down, listen to each other, work to reduce our hate and blame and find compassion for others. You are probably aware there are a couple of spelling or typing errors in the piece. "bBabies" and "Will Eaths woes..." Nicely done, Go well.


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    Thanks,
    Doctor Ricky 1024
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"The Earth spun not an the Angels cried."
"The Earth spun and now the Angels cried."
Hi, your writing was interesting. These are some of the suggestions:
"Flowers died, bBabies cried and addicts tried."
"Flowers died, Babies cried and addicts tried."
"Will Sin and Evil win or do we have still a chance?"
"Will Sin and Evil win or do we still have a chance?"
"Will Eaths woes dissapate and disperse or will the Sun and Moon shed more Gloom?"
"Will Earth's woes dissapate and disperse or will the Sun and Moon shed more Gloom?"
Keep writing.


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    Thanks,
    Doctor Ricky 1024

reply by Dihalia on 21-Oct-2019
    Your welcome!
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This short piece poses the question of what will become of planet earth. Although the ancient times discussed are pre-politics the modern reader can't help but think of how the way we are abusing our planet could cause our destruction. Well done.


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    Thanks and have a great day.
    Doctor Ricky 1024
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Interesting chapter. The structure of the poem was a little unusual and a little hard to follow, but i did enjoy reading it and thank you for sharing this part of your book


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    Thanks,
    Doctor Ricky 1024
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