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"Don't you see yon bonnie, bonnie road?" Did the Welsh use the word bonnie as well as the Scots? I didn't know that. The poem is a very nice way to end this chapter, I'm not surprised you won BOM for this,
Carol


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
    She is quoting from one of 'the border ballads' which refers to the Scots/English borders. I decided to leave it as it is rather than change it perhaps to lovely, lovely which might have been more correct but just didn't sound right. Thanks for another interesting point.
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and which way did he go? I must hurry up and write this comment so I can go to the next chapter. So glad that I have only a few chapters left to read...it has been a great story.


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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story.
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What a choice Tom was faced with so early in their romance, the easy way, the hard way or the middle of the road way. Another good chapter Jim,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
    But not too difficult when one is infatuated with a fairy. Many thanks for reviewing.
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Another good chapter, Jim. As far as I can see, not much changed from the original version. Interesting choices for Tom. The central one is, as you say, very much in line with Pilgrim's Progress. The three choices seem to equate to materialism, mainstream religions, and earth religions.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
    You are in danger of imposing on this book a gravitas it probably doesn't really deserve, but thank you anyway.
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Hi Jim, this is an interesting chapter indeed. Was Derwen capable of controling Tom enterily, or was he capable of thinking for himself? An intriquing question. Well written as always. All best. Ulla:))


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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
    I have said elsewhere that the Tylwyth cannot control humans but they can influence them. i think that applies here.
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'This was the moment for his decision. If he chose correctly now, once the next fourteen years were done, we would be together for the rest of his life. It was time for me to ask the question, "Which road will you take, Tom? Which way will you go?"
It is obvious that Tom took the road that Derwen had in mind. Was she able to control his mind?
Yet another interesting chapter.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thank you for this well-considered review and the six wonderful stars. She definitely cannot control his mind. I have said somewhere else that the Tylwyth have no direct power of control over humans but they can exert influence over them. That argument lies at the very core of the book.
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944 when Tom an eigteen year old(eighteen)

This is a well written and interesting chapter, and the choice given, a hard one. Welsh does sound very difficult to learn~Debbie


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019



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    Thanks for this review and for picking up that typo, which I have now rectified.
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Excellent chapter in this interesting story about an interaction between a human and a fairy leading to their eventual marriage and lives together for many years. Great job weaving a believable story with interesting characters and dialogue.
Bill


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019



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    Thank you so much for this sensitive and complimentary review.
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Well we all know what road he took, or Seren wouldn't be there. I wonder if this actually did happen, how many would make the choice to go with her. It's a lot to take in for mortal man. I think I'd go because it sounded so exciting, a lot better than Tom's life was at that time. Another wonderful chapter in this lovely story. :)) Sandra xxxx

I've asked Tom to remove my poem and it is now described as a ...
1 Minute and 20 seconds' poem!! lol. xxx


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
    But it is the travelling hopefully that is the story, not just the arrival. Thanks for reviewing this. I have rviewed my review of your 1.3333333 minutes poem and restarred it into the bargain

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    LOL! I'm thinking of inventing the 60-minute poem, what do you think?? lol. Thanks for re-reviewing. Tom won't take it off. But, it will be disqualified, I thought it would before you explained the system. Why I didn't realise why it is called a minute poem, is beyond me! I'll put it down to senility!
    I agree, the journey is what it's about. The arrival is a long way down the road, and that is going to be so interesting. I'm off on holiday on Friday, so might not be able to read after Wednesday's part. We are cruising to Barbados, and I don't know if there will be internet on board. Hope so, if not I'll catch up when I get back. xxxx
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I'm glad you have gone into more depth here about the time the two of them met and the conversation that took place and the dilemma Tom has in deciding at this point. I wonder if he ever thought that he might be dealing with a nut case? That thought didn't seem to come up which indicates how into Derwen he was. You are romantic at heart and it shows in your writing, much enjoyed, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
    Thank you for this supportive review and its six star grading. They do say love is blind so perhaps, overcome by the magic of it all he is unable to detect the nuttiness, blinded by love!
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