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Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "The Fisherman's Son-Thirty-Two"

An Incredible Life

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You did a great job, Ulla, with this poignant chapter. You captured the feelings and emotions of Lorenzo perfectly. This chapter was intense and brought back thoughts of how he had found his mother. Readers will easily recall, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Jan. I'm so glad you liked it. I will miss Denise, well. She was a character. All best. Ulla x
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A very sad chapter indeed Ulla, with a very strong adoptive grandmother in Denise Harris is now finally gone, a strong influence gone from David Baker and boys, she'll be terribly missed. A very sad but well written episode Ulla, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : He was surprised (the) see everything was dark. To? 2: the most logic(al) place to look for it...


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Roy. yeah, it is so sad. She will be sorely missed. I will miss her vitality and great sense of humour. I've made the edits and thanks for pointing them out. Kind regards. Ulla:))

reply by royowen on 20-Oct-2019
    Yes, Denise was a great character, so much more than a ?granny?
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You did a great job describing the emotion of this situation. I know Lorenzo had to be in shock. Denise and Lorenz have been so close since his mother died. I am afraid of what this might to do him.


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Barbara, andfor the lovely stars. I so appreciate it. We'll see what will happen. Ulla xx
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A very well done chapter. Complete with all the emotions involved in someone coming upon a deceased person AGAIN as he did with his own Mother. Now the spag department. surprised t(o)[he] see that everything had grown dark.

second door from (t)he kitchen

A beautiful woven throw (rug)

(")Mr Hopkins, I'm Lorenzo Baker

[what] (who) he presumed


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Geoff. I so appreciate the lovely stars and I've done all the edits. Thanks so much for pointing them out. kind regards. Ulla:)))
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Oh, how sad. He's lost his good friend, and nothing will be the same for him. I just hope he's not accused of killing her.

- [his] eyes somewhat adjusted

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Yvonne. I so appreciate it. No, I don't think there's any danger of that. I've made the edit. Thanks a lot for pointing it out. All best. Ulla x
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Oh, I know that was a terrible shock to Lorenzo. Mrs. Harris was like a mother to him and to have found her on the kitchen floor was much more than he could deal with at that time. He has found help at the Hopkins resident. Martha is there to console him. Well done Ulla. Nancy:)


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    thanks so much, Nancy, and for the wonderful recognition. Yes, this is a major blow to Lorenzo. Denise was like a mother. Even I miss her. Thank you so much again. Ulla xx
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Aw, Ulla, I have tears in my eyes. How awful! To find Denise dead the same way he found his mother, that is tragic. I'm so pleased Martha's father is helping him. The poor lad is so distraught, it will take a while before he gets over this. Well done, my friend, you wrote this brilliantly. :) Sandra xxx


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Sandra. This is such a wonderful review. And thanks a lot for the extra star. Poor Denise couldn't live forever, but it was hard on Lorenzo. Thank you so much again. Ulla xxxx
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You continue to impress and amaze me with this well written and fascinatig story. You are doing a great job with this. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thank you so much, Sasha, and for all your support. I'm honoured that you like it so. All the best. Ulla:)))

reply by Sasha on 20-Oct-2019
    I do enjoy this story very much ad love how you you are presenting it.
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