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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Fall"

A terrorist plots the destruction of America.

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The incidence of the rally is well described and compares to many of the religious and political assemblies we have in the states. The name of the story is intriguing. It corresponds to the lead paragraphs, then veers to a totally scenario. And the last paragraph grabs the reader to continue with the next installment. Good reading... ...ec


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    Thanks for reading.

reply by Elaine Chiodi on 24-Oct-2019
    You're welcome... ...ec
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No doubt Banner will need that gun. Exciting part about how Banner rescues the Holy Man's daughter. Although Banner was not supposed to touch her, his Holiness intervened so that the woman's life could be spared. The Holy Man's speech, as it turns out, is mesmerizing and has an amazing impact on the crowd. Banner will soon learn what his mission is, I suppose. Great details in this. judi


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    Banner will be surprised by the mission.
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A very well-written chapter. The hero of the day is not very impressed with the Holiness's speach and still trying to figure out what his actual mission is when he opens the computer he gets a small clue.


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    Banner's mission is becoming clear. Or is it?
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Close call for Banner but it earned him some points to have saved the daughter. I guess the gun must mean that he has a mission to assassinate the Voice? Good description of the power of mass hysteria.


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    Thanks for your continued support.
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Hey Thomas. At the end of the last chapter I remember musing what would happen to Banner if he tried to catch the daughter when she began to fall. You answered that question right away. That was a great way to handle that event. Now I'm intrigued that he will be able to build a weapon from parts in the computer. Robert


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    Thanks for staying with the story.

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 21-Oct-2019
    You bet!
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barbara.wilkey Recommends:
St. Louis Chapter 17 part 2
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I feel many politicians have the same effect on many people and don't say anything worthwild. Once again you have written a good addition to this story. I like your improvements to this story.


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    Thanks for continuing to read.
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Praise be on him that knows what is in store, for you write in mystery and my mind wonders---WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT! Thomas, I bet you're a great fisherman. You know how to set the lure and dangle the bait. I'm waiting on the pull. Good story, still intrigued. :)


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    Thanks for your kind words.
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Hello Thomas
I was tense reading when Banner pushed the holy man's daughter again t the wall of how Banner knew the consequence of touching the Holy man's daughter.
Gert



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    Thanks for your continued support.
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I'm glad Banner was able to save her and wasn't killed in the process. That's one way to smuggle in a gun, lol, very ingenious. It's well-written, interesting start to finish. I look forward to reading more.


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Thomas,

Oh, wow. And nobody searched his 'computer' and found that? That is a bit surprising to me. I realize he's supposed to be a journalist, but these guys stay alive by being pretty smart.

Nice chapter!! Thanks!


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    Thanks for your continued support. Fiction, Baby Doll, fiction.
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