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One day at a time

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dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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We fret about our futures path. (future's)

Lifes precious gift, (Life's)

Living in fear often turns into a self-fulfilling prophecy as we fail to see the good, life continues to grow worse day by day. Well written and rhymed, my friend~Debbie


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019


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It is difficult to live in this world and not fall victim to fear! So many mass shootings, unstable countries at war, terrorism, disease, and on and on! There are days I feel immobilized by it all... You are very right though. The days I succumb to fear are days I am existing but not living... I am going to be more mindful of that thanks to this poetic reminder.--Karenina


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019


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Hello Jaybird. The rhyme and meter of the poem is excellent as usual. What I like about the message is that it suggests everyone live your life and do the things you have to do every day and let the future come, as it will. Just handle today's trouble because tomorrow has enough trouble of its own. Robert


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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Jay, This is a very well written and very true poem with very good advice. We are only given a day at a time. You used very good words that make a lot of sense. Thanks for sharing my friend. Blessings, Teri


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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You are right, a life full of fear is a terrible one. I loved your poem. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect for this piece. For me I think health is number one, then wealth number 2. Thank you for sharing. Blessings. ~Brenda


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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I like the lines: To stumble through this life with fear,
is not the proper route to choose.
I think the comma could be taken out after the word 'fear.' The rest of the poem is great at pointing out how many fears we could have. I think with this line: effecting gains or loss of wealth.
you actually mean 'affecting'
I love the 'F' alliteration in this line: We fret about our futures path.
I think you mean future's path - so just add an apostrophe. Same goes for "Lifes gift" should be Life's gift
I would add a comma after 'day' in the second to last line. But these are just tiny punctuation tweaks. The entire poem is well-done, and the kind of poem I would re-read before tackling a new, frightening challenge.


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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Another winning poem. All that is written is true. Fear of every little
thing can drive a person crazy. Your last two lines says it all. We have to
live life from day to day. As usual, your rhyming is excellent.


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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Jesus actually said, "You've got enough problems today, without worrying about tomorrow, tomorrow will worry about itself!" A beautifully written with a decided philosophical bent to it, definitely very sound advice, well done my friend, blessings, Roy
Typo : our future(')s path.


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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In my opinion, a masterful write, with only a couple of spots that affect the smooth flow of the write. I will not elaborate further, since you have demonstrated no interest or regard for my reviews, with even a simple thank you in acknowledgement. I continue to write reviews of your works, however, strictly for the membership dollars I can earn in support of my own postings or contest entries. One would think, with your exceptional writing gift, you would foster the sensitive spirit necessary for such writing talent...


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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Hi Jaybird,
this is a really great poem. I think as we grow older and realise time is becoming shorter we worry and fret about most things. We cannot change the past or predict the future but if we life from day to day as you suggest then there is every chance we will worry less and enjoy what times we have to come.
Loved these words of wisdom.
Brenda.x


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019


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