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The Loss of One Arm


An oldie renovated with the addition of three verses

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brenda bickers
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Hi Bob,
so many men came back from war with horrific injuries. Most of those would pass it off as just a small price to pay compared to those who didn't come home. I think each and everyone of those men were brave.
This was a nicely written poem.
Brenda.x


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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
    Thank you Brenda and sorry for the slow reply. Your comment is much appreciated
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Hi Bob, I liked it though, and I liked it a lot. Yes, it could very well have been a true story. So many bad things happened during those years of war. All wars only carry bad memories. He suffered the loss of one arm, but that was probably the least he lost Again, it's a well written poem. All best. Ulla:))


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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
    Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. Sorry for taking so long to respond.
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A well-done poem. Yes, it is descriptive of many a soldier returning home not only with the loss of one arm but many monstrous memories. You do well to remind us of the sacrifices so many people have made.
Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
    I totally agree with your comment. We sure owe our veterans a great debt of thanks. Sadly today, too many of us forget the efforts of those who came before us.
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This could be a tribute to anyone who came back from war without a part of their body. How sad it is, but you seldom hear them complain. And because they don't, veterans get pushed back to where many don't get a chance to make it to an appoint before they take their own lives. They should be right up there with being taken care of as children. They wouldn't send an ill child away, but they have turned away sick veterans.
Sorry, I got lost up on my soapbox there for a minute or two.
Great poem! Patty


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Don't apologise, I'd gladly share that soapbox with you. I think the aged, who have worked and paid taxes all their life and the veterans who fought to defend our country are entitled to expect total support. On the other hand, those who don't work......I'll leave it at that.
    Thank you for reading and reviewing
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Well done. I never know what to expect when I read a poem or story of war. I served in Vietnam and it maybe that there remains some fear of what I will read. I appreciate when I read a poem such as yours; one that does not glorify the ravages and horror that is any conflict. Very well done with quiet and dignified imagery. Thank you for sharing. Go well.


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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
    What a delightful response. And thank you for serving your country and providing security in this crazy old world.

reply by David R. Davis on 29-Oct-2019
    My pleasure.
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A very well-written heartfelt war poem. So many heroes who go in no fear to a war they believe to be the right choice just to come back with more losses than wins.


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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
    That I'm afraid is the story of most soldiers. You have summed it up superbly
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You're so right, it could have been. The repetition of thought of the final line in the last three stanzas reflects the courage and stoic acceptance of fate. Well written... ...ec


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
    I believe our parents and grandparents were far tougher than us and they tended to accept their fates withiout complaint. We, I'm afraid have much to learn

reply by Elaine Chiodi on 28-Oct-2019
    so true... ...ec
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In this excellent poem, you have used a wide range vividly specific details to bring to life a storehouse of memories, thoughts of hard times and wonderful times.


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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
    Like I said in my notes it was an old poem I wrote many years ago and when I looked at it this morning it seemed to take on a new life. Thank you for reading and reviewing
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Nice poem - I haven't heard any other versions of that old song. At first I thought you were taking up the Halloween theme and telling the tale of the "haunt" that went around saying "who stole my arm"
All that aside - this is a good poem and gives credit to those who serve.


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
    I'm not familiar with that Halloween piece, in Australia we don't celebrate Halloween. Where could I find the song you refer too? Thank you for the review

reply by Gail Denham on 29-Oct-2019
    It isn't a song - it's an old story that folks tell around the campfire - someone stole a corpses arm - nowhe goes around saying "who stole my arm" and then BOO
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What a sad tale you created, yet through it all this veteran keeps up a positive attitude . Maybe that can be attributed to that British stiff upper lip? I' m sure there are many stories like this about people sacrificing for their country or their beliefs.


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
    To me it highlights how much tougher our parents and grandparents were. In comparison to the difficulties they experience, we are relative wimps. Thank you for taking the time to review
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