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Sophie's Ghost.


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  19 total reviews 
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WryWriter
 
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This flash story of yours could make a great longer work, if you so desired to expand it into a short story or book. Have him revisit the ghost; the ghost follows him home; he trying to understand what it is the ghost wants and tries to pacify the ghost; the ghost leaves because of jealousy towards his wife who doesn't see the ghost, only to return again-and-again in times of danger for him; then maybe ending with the ghost saving the wife and leaving forever; or maybe a twist--where after the ghost leaves, he has an accident and the ghost has him forever.... Good job...a few minor edits needed, but overall, a very enjoyable reading experience.


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much for taking the trouble of reading and writing such a long review and the suggestion .I am especially touched because it no no longer pays .here most of the reviewers read so that they can collect members dollars.
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Sounds as if someone spent to much time in a Pub. I bet the person on the phone thought so too. Saw something like this one time and it turned out to be an owl. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much
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Interesting story with a good twist at the end. Sadly for me I found the write to be very stilted. It was more like stating fact than sharing what would be described as a strange and eerie event

Best wishes
Freda


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much.
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damommy
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Certainly he was scared but all the time, Sophie was trying to help. At least, she scared him off the path that would have taken him to his death. It's nice to see a friendly ghost.

-drove straight without turning right. (wasn't he supposed to turn left to go home?)


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much.
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estory
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Interesting ghost story with a strange little twist at the end; it turns out the ghost of the girl has a soft spot for people with kids I guess, and ends up warding this guy off the dangerous road. I liked the descriptions of the ghost swinging in the tree, very spooky. Also a good set up. estory


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Well written and very descriptive. You held my interest the whole way through. I think Night Clark should be Night Clerk but other than that all good. I was happy that the ghost was in fact a helpful and compassionate spirit that saved Jatin so he could go home to his wife and children.


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Phyllis Stewart
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" Yes someone warned me."
A kind ghost.

So the ghost was not dangerous, just the opposite. It kept him from turning, and he's safe now. Good ending.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much and sorry for the delay in replying .was quite sick .
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zanya
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Yes sends a shiver down the spine reading about this ghost !! atmosphere effectively evoked for the reader without too much ghostly ado and a great pic


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much .
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Cindy Warren
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Sophie turned out not to be a scary ghost after all. She saved him, if not his life then at least a lot of trouble. "Jatin, where you" needs a comma after Jatin and closing quotation marks.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much .
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royowen
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What a very kind and compassionate, knowing there would possible devastation for Jatin, the Sophie apparition goaded Jatin into taking an alternative route opposed ro taking the normal one, and saving him from harm. Well done my friend, a great short story, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much .

reply by royowen on 23-Nov-2019
    Welcome
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