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Comment by
Ashley Weigand
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Sometimes I feel like poems that are made to be so short lose the "poetic" aspect of themselves and are just words made to fit the syllables. Also when I go to review other people's works I'm not always sure how to quite explain what about them I like; I can just say I really like this! You did good keeping to the constraints of the contest while still making something that actually means something. Good job!


 Comment Written 02-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it!
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Aussie
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A well written contest entry. The eye is the mirror of the soul. Not easy to put a story into three lines, you did it! How precious are our eyes, snapshots of life and of love. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it!
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Patty Palmer
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When the world is passing by. When your days have gone awry When you can't see eye to eye, you are all I see.
When it seems like all is lost. When you know you've tried at all costs, but still can't see eye to eye, you're all I see.

Don't know where the words came from except when I was reading your poem, it just seemed like it needed to be written. LOL

Have a great day!:
Patty


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Wow! That was pretty flippin' awesome Patty. Glad I could inspire that. Thank you for your time and review.

reply by Patty Palmer on 07-Nov-2019
    As always you're welcome!
    Patty
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Michele Harber
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Wow! I'm impressed that you can convey that depth of emotion in only seven words and eight syllables. While the words definitely express a deep feeling of love, I have to say, in all honesty, that the picture doesn't induce the same reaction. Perhaps it's just me but, with a shot that close, I see the bags and the wrinkles, as well as two lashes directly over the eye that just look as though they're going to cause extreme discomfort. This is just my personal opinion, but I feel that you'd benefit from a softer picture with less distraction.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    LOL! Yeah you might be right.....wasn't many pics to choose from that I liked, but thank you for your time and review. Glad you enjoyed my work.

reply by Michele Harber on 06-Nov-2019
    No problem. I always enjoy reading your work.
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Mark D. R.
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The 'eyes' obviously say it all in your 2-4-2 contest entry.

Nice total overall presentation in a few words.

Best wishes in the voting

I too have used FanArt's GaliaG for my posts (-:


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it!
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Apriori
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Good use of image to complete this very simple but effective form. The poem contrast the you with the I, and creates a bridge from you to I with an eye. I am not sure that I have much more to contribute here, only that it met the criterion and was crafted and an effective use of the form.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it!
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Sally Law
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I love a focused man in love. This is a sure winner for the contest, and the captures your heart in just a few words. Sending you my very best today, and best wishes for the contest, dear poet,
Sal :)


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it! LOL
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Teri7
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This is a very well written 2-4-2 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good imagery from the art work you chose and very good words. Best wishes in the contest my friend. Blessings, Teri


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it!
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Mike Stevens
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Another fine shorter, Roddy--and the picture, it looks like the eye is staring into my soul, accusing me. "Look, Eye, I'll never shoplift again, okay?"


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    LOL!!! You are a flippin' idiot...(the good funny kind, not the Trumpian kind. lol Thank you my friend.
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Cybertron1986
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Simple. Concise. And, well presented. I like the variety of implications this presents to the reader. It relates to many readers regardless of the connections and relationships they are involved in either intimately, or colloquially. Well done!

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 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
    Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it!
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