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Scene at a Pink-skied Planet

a one scene script

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sunnilicious
 
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Great artwork choice for presentation. Rabbit cacciatore or Possum Stew to start... Ooo I am scared of this story. Well thought out. Clearly written. I liked the bickering. I have a headache. Nice work :)


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
    Thanks, sunnilicious. Bill
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Oh, I read this in the wrong order. This was funny in all the identity confusion. It's good that they ate the rabbit (uncooked?) instead of each other.


 Comment Written 04-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    They?re the rappin? rabbits.
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Okay that was quite a bit farther than your usual left field, yeah?! Did we ever get straight who's name was what or what's name was who....? :) Thanx for sharing, Sir Bill -- my brain is now tired... LOL!! Yvette


 Comment Written 04-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    Sorry. Pink planet sun stroke.
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Wow, Bill you managed to get me totally confused here. Who the heck are we talking about here? One rabbit seems as good as the other one. I loved it. I'm still not any the wiser, though. Ulla:)))


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    Rabbit?
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OK. Now I know for sure that you are smoking, snorting or otherwise imbibing on something very intoxicating because, you are as high as a kite flying high in the sky, without a parachute. Though your rhymes are kinda cute.


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    This is why I only write beats and never rap.

reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    This is why I only write beats and never rap.
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This is a well penned script meeting all the appropriate rules of format and construction. The word play is interesting throughout as you walk the reader through the obvious confusion of the characters. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 04-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    Thanks, MA, for the kind review. Bill
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Nuts, eh? Wring neck... not ring neck (unless it's a pheasant). This is a thoroughly hallucinatory scene, which I expect was the point. My mind's still reeling!


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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Sally. You wreally saved the day.
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Hi, interesting that you color code your characters, I've never seen that done on a script before? I wondered as I read, where do you see this placed in terms of the demographic of your reader? What would it look like in the real world outside of FS. Just say?? Because, if you've done it to entertain people here, then you've no doubt succeeded with your fans, five for the wit within the dialogue. But, if you want to write for plays or the screen, then this would be worth a 3. It has no dimension to it atm. It is not formatted to a professional standard and all that makes it very hard to review, in all honesty. I mean, is it for TV, film, theatre, radio?? Who would be your target audience and where is it going as far as the structure of the three act play and your plot arc? This would be a five minute slot ...

Interesting dialogue, and I hope that helps in some way and if you're chasing ratings and stars, get back to me and I will re-read. Have a lovely day/night, Eve.


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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    I appreciate the honest feedback, Eve. This is definitely not for prime time and totally a lark.
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I guess thwy are ging to have rabb it stew, L O L A good write and first review of script writing. I enjoyed reading your script. Thank you for sharing with me.


 Comment Written 04-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    Thank you, Mary Ann, for the kind review. Bill
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Poor little rabbit. I don't think they cared if they were eating Butch or not. Guess MacDonald's hasn't made it to Lepus 5 yet, and everyone gets hungry. :)


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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
    I'm glad you figured it out, Phyllis.
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