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Pons and Ned meet at different locations

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Hahahahaha, Bill, I love it and I'm still laughing. I've missed Ned and Pons. They are just too funny and Ned is just too stupid. I've said it before. Where the heck do you get it from? And where the heck are my sixes? Ulla:))


 Comment Written 13-Nov-2019



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    Thank you, Ulla. This may be their last pool closing.

reply by Ulla on 13-Nov-2019
    Yeah, I could well imagine. Hehe. :))
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Pons kind of changed his tune quick about shooting holes in the tarp. They aren't leaving three feet of water in the pool are they? Funny Ned and Pons episode.


 Comment Written 13-Nov-2019



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    I predict a hospital visit.
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Pons seems to be able to translate Ned's unique pronunciations, such as hang glidin in Beer-mooter. Ned's foray into the swimming pool might end in disaster.
Pons concludes it would be better to shoot holes in the tarp. Apollo doesn't know what he's in for, calling on this pair to close the pool. Ned might end up shooting holes in the pool. judi


 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019



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    I would fear more for Pons or Ned?s foot.

reply by judiverse on 13-Nov-2019
    Oh, yes. You never can tell what Ned will do. judi
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This is an interesting piece. Those two with a gun I imagine someone is bound to get hurt maybe both. Your script is well-written, interesting very realistic.


 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019



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    Thanks, MD.
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This is written in correct script format and contains no unintentional SPAG making for a smooth and easy reading experience. I guess holding it down with rocks never occurred to them. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


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    They?re the worst.
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No, don't shoot holes in the tarp! He'll probably destroy the pool. Oh dear! What was Pons thinking? Where is this Apollo guy and why is he not working with them. Is he really chicken?


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    Doesn?t look like these guys will be the regular pool closers.
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I like the funny language Ned is using and the association with other languages - Mexican I meant Spanish:) And only Ned can fix the trap by shooting a twenty rounds. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.


 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019



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    Thanks, Iza
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Uh disaster alert. Ned with a loaded weapon does not bode very well for a safe or successful operation. Something tells me that Apollo is going to be more than a litte bit upset with the outcome of this operation. Serves him right to trust these two with anything that he does not supervise closely.


 Comment Written 11-Nov-2019



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    I think Apollo may be the Moe that Larry and Curly here need to go on.
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What a pair. It's hilarious. Ned's almost savant-like with his common sense, Pons it's not socially acceptable but bows to its practicality. Shooting holes in the pool tarp.


 Comment Written 11-Nov-2019



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    Thanks, Darlene, for giving the boys a look. Bill

reply by Darlene Franklin on 11-Nov-2019
    my pleasure.
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LOL! Love the ending. Pons saves the day. No one wants to see Ned drop his pants and wade in stagnant water... and then godonlyknows what he might do. :)


 Comment Written 11-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Phyllis, for giving the boys a look. Bill
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