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When we finally leave, we have indeed reached the choking point or the point of no return--although we may visit. Good luck in the contest if still ongoing. Marilyn


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    Thank you, Marilyn.
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lol..!! Yep, that one had me laughing out loud, Bill -- what a great offering for the contest with so much truth laced in those short yet meaningful lines!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette


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    Thanks, Yvette.
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Travel from here to there a thousand miles or more and at the end of your tortuous journey you will find that your constant companion was and has always been, yourself. You cannot escape the one who know you best.


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    Thanks, nomi, for taking a look at this.
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You've written about an uncertain turning point in every young adult's life. The fear of leaving the security of there home, yet the excitement, determination to make their own way. It's well-written, your great word choice lets the reader feel your character's fearfulness, determination. Nicely done. Good luck with your contest.


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    Thank you, MD, for the excellent review. Bill
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Hmm. Without the picture, I was thinking it was an older woman trying to decide whether to continue life dutifully or go out on her own but with the picture, I think of a teenage girl. My favorite line was: Pride and prejudice parked.


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    Thanks, lyenochka, for giving this a look.
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That's a big turning point in a young person's life. They have to strike out on their own eventually, unless their parents let them bunk in the basement. It can get complicated. Hopefully they have the skills they need to make it. Pride and prejudice parked--nice alliteration. A very thoughtful look at what's ahead for this young person. Best of luck in the contest. judi


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    Thank you, Judi

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    You're welcome. judi
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Hi Bill, I will admit that I'd never come across the word 'chokepoint', but then again English is not my first language. So I looked it up and have learnt something new. Mostly a military term, but very appropiate for your Acrostic and its theme. Good luck. All best. Ulla:))


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    Thank you, Ulla
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Interesting subject matter to place into this offset Acrostic poem. It is different than most Acrostic poems written in this format that I've been. Good Luck in the contest. Blessings


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    Thanks, g.
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Your acrostic poem and your topic are very good. It reminds me of that magnet on so many refrigerators when I was growing up: Teenagers, leave home now while you still know everything. Good luck in the contest.


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    Thank you, Susan
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I like this acrostic poem. "Chokepoint" is an intriguing root word. It's sort of a brutal noun, and that suits the topic of the poem: the harsh realities of maturing and finding your own way in life.

I wish you the best of luck when the contest is judged {smiles}.


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    Thank you, Alex
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