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Essence of love

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Hello, this is a very good Essence poem. Two good lines that not only rhyme but also make good sense. These short forms are not easy - it is difficult to get a message across with so few words - you have done so. Good Luck - Dorothy


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
    Thank you!
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A very nice essence poem. You seemed to follow the rules of two
lines and six syllables. Your poem has a lot to say about love and hate.
Let's hope love always wins against hate.


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your time and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. We can only hope and do our part to make it so.
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This is a clever write and love conquers all as hate can never survive over love, I enjoyed your write and wish you luck with the contest, this one gets my vote, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your time and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. As always I hope this finds you well, have a great day!
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this is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt dear anonymous! i am slightly baffled it's not doing so well. i love the message and the rhyme.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka xxx


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
    Thank you, I appreciate it. I thought it would do a little better too, I guess love conquering all is not the message people want to here.
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A very well-written essence poem about life that can always conquer and drive hatred away. But hatred cannot over power love or drive it away.


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



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    No it can not, but it sure never stops trying. Thank you for your time and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, have a great day!
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Since an essence poem is so short, I think you have to nail the rhymes for sure. Retreats and beat are not exact rhymes. Why don't you try
Love grows and hate retreats
For hate knows love defeats

You loose a little appeal this way, but the rhymes work. I've been thinking about this a long time, and that's the best I can come up with. I am sure that you dealt with this problem. I think that I would opt for correct rhymes.
And, I would add a photo or at least a colored background and nice larger font. Make your nice words pop. It could even be a battle scene. Or a waving white flag.
Good luck.


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
    Thank you Debbie for your advice, time, review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, have a great day!
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I think this is a good entry for the Essence Poetry contest.
Your short verse has a good message.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



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    Thank you for your time and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, have a great day!
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This is good. It can be tricky to get that internal rhyme in especially if one is unaware that the cross rhyme here (grows/knows) is a form of internal rhyme in that it takes place internally and not at the end of the line.


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



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    Thank you for your time and review.
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This is a potentially successful entry into the essence poetry contest. Your syllable count is correct and you use an internal and an external rhyme. I would have liked to have seen a piece of Fan Art.


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your time and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, have a great day!
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Hey, you did a good job with this short, short. Amazing all the different poetry styles one can explore. Each word was selected with thought and held deep meaning. It was uplifting to read. Hugs, Lou


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your time and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, have a great day!
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