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Laughter is everything

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ExperiencingLiphe
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This looks like a perfect poem to me my friend. And when I read your title I wanted to scream YOU!. lol. I'm glad you enjoy it where you are. I know there are always downsides but to be happy the majority of the time is the goal.


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Yes, it does have its downside but I do love it here.
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Hi Sasha!
Yes, this is fine, fluid-flowing free verse. Forte is spelled right. If you want to be super precise, you'd have the same special 'e' symbol with a line atop it that you'd see in cliche. But US English does not require it.

This works well without punctuation, though I personally think a few things might be good, like a ? at the end. A dash where the enjambment is awkward would also aid the perfect flow. A line break for a breath before the closing sentence would also be good.

Example:

Being me
is a continuous
adventure
here in Mazatlan--
friends are
abundant and the
laughter never stops

why
would I
want
to be anyone else?

Not reviewing much lately. Nice to see you after a long time.

Warmly,
rd



 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Thanks, great to hear from you again. Thanks for the suggestions, I sincerely appreciate them.

reply by rama devi on 20-Nov-2019
    Happy to help. :)

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Nice to see you here again too.

reply by rama devi on 20-Nov-2019
    :-))

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    The sight doesn't like that symbol. It freaks out and flags it when you try to use it.

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reply by rama devi on 20-Nov-2019
    what??
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I think this qualifies as a free verse, although I'm not an expert.
I love that you're living your adventure in Mazatlan and even more, I love that you share your adventures with us.
Keep up the good work.
Sharon


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks, I love to talk and when I am alone I love to write. Glad you enjoy my silly attempts at writing.
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Awe, Sasha, you have tried your hand on poetry and a free verse at that. Congratulations. So well done and a poem which is so full of joy as well. I love it. Well done. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks. Don't expect another very soon, it will be awhile before I delve into poetry again...LOL
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This is a very lovely poem. I can feel the love and happiness you have for yourself in it. It is a true expression of who you are. I think you did very well.


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks, I am thrilled you liked this one.
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I am not sure of what the rules are for free verse, but I enjoyed your writing of a poem. I hope you will maybe write a few more poems.
Patricia


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    I may try a few but not for awhile.
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It absolutely qualifies as Free Verse since it has no fixed rhyme pattern or meter. It's a fun piece that is very you in every way. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks for the kind comments about my poem.

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 19-Nov-2019
    Always my pleasure.

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks.

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks.
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Ya know what? I have come to believe that is right...to be YOU is a continuous adventure. As you regale your readers, you've proven that joy can be found in the most dire of circumstances.
Enjoyed this little free verse very much, Sasha


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks, I am so pleased you enjoyed this one.
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I don't know much about free verse myself, but it sounds good to me. It does seem that being you is an adventure and it's always good to be able to laugh at ones self and with others. Well done. Rox


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
    Thanks, I find myself laughing all the time, every day.
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You did it!! Why indeed would you want to be anyone else. The laughter never stops due to your positive attitude on life and your hilarious sense of humor. From what I can gather, your life has been a continuous adventure since day one of your life.
and, it is still unfolding.
Thank you for writing and sharing this poem. I loved it.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
    Thank you, I am thrilled you liked this one.
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