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Sonnet

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Michael McCottry Bell Jr
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This was a magnificent entry for the contest. The sentiment reminded me of a song(or lyrics I was trying to write about two loving roses could grow in the snow(most hazardous or unpredictable situations) We all know that feeling of love we lost/never adhered to/or just flat out missed the signs and opportunity's(oh man I could write 154 sonnets on that theme alone ;)

Great job and congrats on the second place finish


Michael


 Comment Written 03-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
    Michael, thank you for the great review. I think the responses to this piece prove that we all know the feeling of regret over paths not taken.

    Steve
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Steve,
What a beautifully written love sonnet about a love that was lost by ignoring it. I like how you spaced the poem at the turn.
The rose in the snow is an odd and memorable thing and a ggod metaphor for what could have been.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Happy Holidays. Keep writing
Joan


 Comment Written 03-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
    Joan, thanks for the great review. I think yours is #25 which should push it to an All Time Best rating.

    Steve

reply by dragonpoet on 04-Dec-2019
    You're welcome. Good , it deserves it.
    Joan
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Congratulations Steve, this is a superb poem, beautiful sentiment and in perfect form. I enjoyed this very much and again congratulation. Warm regards Dorothy


 Comment Written 02-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
    Dorothy, many thanks for the warm words.

    Steve
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You deliver a beautiful example of sonnet form in this well penned piece. The imagery is haunting as it paints fluid water color images within the reader's imagination. The closing couplet is powerful and memorable as it lingers in thought long after the page has been turned. Congratulations on the 2nd Place finish as it is more than well deserved and thank you very much for sharing it.
P.S. We have to stop meeting like this or folks will start talking LOL.


 Comment Written 01-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
    Well, I don't mind people talking, as long as you keep on giving me sweet reviews like this one!

    Steve
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Oh God! Why did you have to post this superb work in the same comp as I. This reeks of the Bard's skill in his Sonnet 18 - "Shall I compare thee..."
This is probably one of the best works I have read on this site.
Regards
Reg


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
    Ah, flattery will get you everywhere. Compared to Shakespeare no less. I suppose I will have to check out your vastly inferior sonnet now!

    Seriously, Reg, many thanks for this wonderful rave review. My muse has been missing in action for a few months, but she seems to have come back refreshed.

    Steve
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This is a beautiful sonnet, Steve, in perfect iambic pentameter and lovely rhymes, but what I like best is the telling of a sweet and touching story. This is certain to be a winner in this contest. If not, I will be totally surprised and disappointed.


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
    Ah, I wish I had half your confidence, Adonna. I thought I had a pretty good Acrostic, but some cheeky person snatched the first prize from me. Oh, yes, that was you. Congratulations on a beautiful piece.

    And seriously, thank you for the very kind review and the six stars.

    Steve
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A sad love story sonnet - or at least, that's what I read - definitely not about a real rose. It seems the relationship is ended but the wish and illusions still continue.


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Helen.

    Yes, definitely a love story of sorts and a theme of paths not taken.

    Steve
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Oh, what might have been. It tugs at the heart to think how one moment in time, if used well, could lead to so much more. What an excellent topic for a sonnet.
Best of luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
    Indeed. I know we're not supposed to let the might-have-beens get to us, but it's hard sometimes.

    Thanks for the nice review.

    Steve
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Oh, wow, this is really beautiful, Steve. You did a fabulous job executing this sonnet. The last line is extraordinary - I can see that as a theme in a love song. Hugs, Lou


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
    Thanks so much, Lou.

    Perhaps I should take up song-writing - even though I don't have a musical bone in my body.

    Steve
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You write an excellent sonnet, Steve. There is so much to like about this one. Six virtual stars for the one that got away.

I thought your enjambment between the first and second stanzas worked particularly well.

I would suggest you either present the whole sonnet in one continuous block or put a space between the first two stanzas.

The metaphor of the rose and true love is a hackneyed one, but you have given it such a fresh twist here that you get away with it. Kudos.


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Tony. I dithered about the stanza breaks. I didn't want to break the first two as I normally would because of the enjambment across them, but I didn't want a big solid block either, so I thought maybe 8/6 like an Italian sonnet might be the way to go.

    Anyway, thanks again for the fine review and the virtual sixer.

    Steve
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