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It is certainly an original line of thought. It flowed well, but the URL insertions throughout detract from the writing - perhaps it would be better to reference them (see notes #1) in the text and provide the addresses in the notes. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


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Hello djeckert

I read you article and to tell you the truth.
I found it interesting, and didn't even know about folks finding
Local jobs.
Gert



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I'm not sure who you're referring to as Luciferians, politicians or big business. I did find a few errors:
1. The sentence "Sure, buying local is a great America supporting, and small business supporting thing to do," is clunky. I'd streamline it to read "Sure buying local and small business' is good for America."
2. the m in May shouldn't be capitalized.
3. Maming should be maiming.


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This is pretty strong satire. I did sincerely laugh at number 3. For some reason I kept began to picture restaurant staff holding a cloak and dagger style meeting in the dark, maybe with a Coca-Cola scented candle lit in the middle of the room. Maybe they first plan to knock off the customers who keep taking all the condiment packets and free napkins, and the toilet paper out of the bathrooms.
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Job #2) Maming, and even killing unsuspecting victims at the local outpatient clinic and/ or inpatient hospital.
I think you mean "Maiming and even killing"
so just change 'maming' to 'maiming' and I would take the comma out after the first word. You have some good sources here. I think I would put them in the author notes.


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    Ha, ha that's some funny imagery there you share , from my Mcnumber 3. I used to joke with my wife that it's probably those salt packets that are the most nutritious thing to come from that Mc place. But it's probably the napkins. lol. Thanks for pointing out my spelling error. I kind of looked at it with suspicion ... I should have run it through the old spell checker, I guess. Thanks for reading and correcting and offering up a creative scene. God Bless
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A rather negative view of the culture. I don't think it's that bad... yet. Without someone to guide the people, the worst could happen, but I'm holding out hope that people will be glad they're doing well and not envy everyone doing better.


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