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First the war...the marshal

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Rating of Chapter 12 -
Hungry Reb
Yep, its best to stay close to the barn and wait while Jeb is out making sure the coast is clear. Can't take the chance of being over run.


 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the excellent rating and your comments. Catherin
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Hungry Reb
I enjoyed reading your writing. You seem to have a good handle on That niche. It is easy to picture the characters in that real life situation during the Civil War. I look forward to reading more of your writing.


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Bill, thank you for your excellent rating and your kind words. Catherin
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Hungry Reb
I love the way you write in era and situation character. The story has a very real feel to it, which I both like and admire.
The realism of the poverty stricken times, civil war era, as well as the hope for a better tomorrow are well done.

The narrative character who starts the story confuses me a bit. I assume the first person voice that starts the dialog is Jake. Then there are parts where Jake is a third person character... then back to first person narrative in the last paragraph.
It could be me.

Still, a very cool peice.
JT


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
    Thank you, JT, for your excellent rating and your kind words. Thank you for you constructive comments. Catherin
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Unexpected stop
A Gallant RESCUE OF THE BOY AND GLAD HE STUCK AROUND TO HER THEM IN THEIR TIME OF NEED FOR IT WAS A BIT MUCH FOR A YOUNG CHILD TO HANDLE ALL BY HIMSELF.


 Comment Written 25-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your excellent rating and your kind comments. Thank you, Catherin.
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Unexpected stop
Hi there,

You did a good job of phonetically portraying this dialect. Whenever you tell a story with a lot of dialogue, it is important that the narrative be clear and concise. The reader will be distracted enough by trying to puzzle out what the characters are saying.

a few notes:

'...dress holding a shot gun shotgun steps...' Always use the compound form of the word when there is one.

'...in the wood pile and even less to cut.' Same thing as the previous note.

'With the sun desending descending on the western horizon+, In a piece where you are purposely misspelling words to show a certain dialect, you need to have all the other narrative free of spelling errors. You need a comma after this introductory phrase.

'Gazing into + the depth of the ebony night she is quiet, unmoving I doubt she will reply.' Missing the article 'the' in this sentence.

'Staying in the pines+, I stayed away from other rebs and yanks roaming the countryside. Need the comma after the introductory phrase 'staying in the pines.'

'Grinning with pride+, I reply,' Same as the previous note.

One of the things I tell my students in creative writing is to read the piece OUT LOUD in your first edit. Sometimes you can hear the errors in grammar. Next, I recommend the use of a good style guide. The text I use in my class is 'Elements of Style 2017.' My students enjoy the way it is laid out, and in an easy to read style.

I hope my notes are helpful.

~Mustang Patty~


 Comment Written 25-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your constructive review. I always look for ways to improve my creative endeavors. Catherin
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A Lone Cabin
I really enjoyed reading this. I read some of your story before. But not this part this was really good. Thank You for sharing this. I hope to read more soon.


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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much for your excellent rating and your kind words, Christine. Thank you, Catherin
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A Lone Cabin
the war does funny things to folks they try to get by best they can helping where needed and in this case Jeb is staying put for now to help the boy and woman.


 Comment Written 25-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your excellent rating and your observation. Yes, war changes situations and people. Thank you, Catherin

reply by country ranch writer on 25-Jan-2019
    smiles
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After War's End
I enjoyed your story it was enjoyable. I wish I could have read more. It was entertaining. I like hearing more stories about the war. My family is from the South. Thank You for sharing your talents.


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your excellent rating and you kind words. [My family was from Alabama and I was raised in Texas...I'm all Southern!]

reply by Christine C Autry on 20-Jan-2019
    You are so welcome
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After War's End
You have quite a flair for writing this type of story. You are doing a good job in telling this story. Kudos to you. Keep on writing. I look forward to reading more. TA ";-)


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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your excellent rating and your kind words. Thank you Teresa.
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Rating of Chapter 7 -
The Ravages of War
This is a wonderfully historical account of the 8th Texas Rangers. It is very accurate as well as moving to read all that they endured during the war. The details make this so good and your handling of the facts in a first person manner keeps the reader engaged because it appears personal. Well done.



 Comment Written 10-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
    Thank you for your excellent rating and the kind words. Catherin
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