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Scene at a Christmas Shop 3

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Ahaha, this explains what I missed earlier. I'm reading your story out of sequence. Sorry about that, Bill. It's wonderfully written. All best. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019



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    Thanks, Ulla
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This is well penned and adheres to script formatting nicely. The sharp satire on the Christmas shopping scene was not lost on this reader as the materialism shines through brilliantly. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
    Thanks, MA
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Good for Pons!! Although I'm thinking we could still enlist Rudolph and his pals... :) I know I've read the next one, but I need to go back and glance at it.... have you done number 5 yet?? :) This one was well done, sir -- thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Five is out. Six is in the oven.
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Right on to Pons for standing up for his cousin Ned. Some people are easy victims because they don't look for the bad in people. They accept people as always being nice, even though they are sometimes not. Those of us who are aware. need to step up and let people know that mistreating these gems is not OK.


 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019



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    Pons should represent us and our better angels.
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Here we see Pons protectiveness of Ned. And Ned has disappeared, just after having his self-image as his mother's hero torn apart. Great character building and conflict.


 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thank you, Darlene.
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I'm glad the rude dogs are getting put in their place, and now I'll have to wait to see how the next segment goes. I have a feeling it's going to be a happy end for Ned. (hope so)


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Happy endings come after unhappy trials.

reply by brenda faye curtis on 25-Nov-2019
    Yeah, that's the way it usually goes.
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Poor Ned has gone missing. Maybe that will give pause to those who make fun of him. Pons is supportive and quick to shoot down those who try to make Ned a joke. Pallas, at least, is ready to help Pons look for him. I'm glad you've taken this turn; instead of making fun you show that he has feelings, even if he isn't the brightest bulb. judi


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Judi. I am turning a corner with these characters and hope to continue expanding their universe.

reply by judiverse on 26-Nov-2019
    You're welcome. It will be excellent to do that. It doesn't seem fair that Ned is always the butt of jokes because of his ignorance. judi
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Hurray for Pons! He should have given him more than a bloody nose. Poor Ned. I bet we find him in the toy department. Hope he's okay. Love the granddaddy of all grapes remark.


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Yvonne. Readers are quite concerned about Ned.
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Oh my, Poor Ned. He could be anywhere. What will he do without Pons too to guide him. We might be surprised but
we have to wait till the next posting of
"Scene at a Christmas Shop 4" Well done, Bill. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thank you, Nancy
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Thank you, I feel a lot better now that the jerk got what he deserves, lol. I do hope they find Ned and that he's alright. This is a well-written, script, very believable. Your characters came to life.


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2019



reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
    Thanks, MD. Ned will be taking a bit of a vision quest shortly.
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