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Scene at a Christmas Shop 6 WL

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Hi Bill, this is just amazing. I'm not quite sure what to make of it all. But it appears we're watching Ned's parents and Pons's parents even before they were conceived. An interesting prospect. It's a wonderful idea, though. All best. Ulla:))


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    Thank you, Ulla, for giving this a look. Bill
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I think they should definitely make a film of this version of "It's a wonderful life." I'd buy that! I also can't agree more that each person in our lives helps shape who we are.


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    Thank you, Brenda, for the super review. Bill
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LOL! Leave it to our Bill to make a Pons and Ned Christmas Carol...!! ;) :) Lovin' , Sir Bill, and the 'reverse affects' that our simple and wonderful Ned's presence had on people! :) :) Thanx for sharing and I'm looking forward to the next installment! ;) Yvette


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    Thank you, Yvette.
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I hope Ned can see how important his birth was. Hopefully, we won't feel the way he has. Your script is well-written, interesting, believable, nice job.


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    Thanks, MD
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Yay! Ned learns fast in his dreams! I am glad that he can see that his life has made a big difference in his mother's and Pons' lives! There's hope for him yet!


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    Thanks, lyenochka. Time to wrap this up and get back to ? reality.
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I don't know how you manage to pull this unusual vernacular, Bill, but you do. It it familiar but not just as easy as that to spell.

Even though I've missed a few segments, this is terrific story with excellent characters.

Superb script, Bill. :)

Gloria



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    Thank you, Gloria.
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I have to say a good word for Ded, not to mention Ned's logic. Entertaining as always.

If you want to know about spags, 'the' is repeated in the following: Now, to the the Maninoff family.

Cheers
Judy


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    Thank you, Judy. Happy Thanksgiving!
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Now he understands that Pons needs him in his life, and so does his mother, her definitely!! We all make a difference, realising it is the problem. This will make Ned feel very important, and hopefully, come back to being himself. This is my favourite Christmas story so far! Well done, I'm already looking forward to the next part. :)) Sandra xx


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    Thank you, Sandra. Happy Thanksgiving!
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I'm glad you were pointing out the good things about Ned and what Pons and others would have missed if he hadn't been around. He wouldn't have been there to keep his mom from taking that dancing job or prevent Pons from being such a meanie. Ned's friendship really means something to Pons. You might want make the Ded character not quite so dreadful, maybe more like the angel in "It's a Wonderful Life." Great story. judi


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    I feel Ded is pretty congenial for Death. I?ve used him before. He is only seen by Ned, who has no fear of him. He came once for Ned, but Ned was late. Ded referred to him as the late Ned Knuckeled.
    We?ll see Ded a couple more times before he leaves with one of my other characters.

reply by judiverse on 29-Nov-2019
    Such a gloomy name, though. judi
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Oh dear, this is starting to look like a parody of "It's A Wonderful Life" which is an icon of American holiday tradition. I can't wait to see how this all pans out in the end. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Thanks, MA, for the positive review. Bill
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