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Scene at a Christmas Shop 8 CC

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Oh, you are just really having fun with this one.... I'm thinking we might oughta limit the egg nog intake these days, yeah? :) :)
Please forgive my 'running behind' again ... as mid-terms close in, my tutoring schedule has ballooned and my 'free time' has all but vanished! Exams are next week so there is a light at the end of the tunnel - LOL! :) A very Merry Christmas to you from my little corner of the world!! ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
    Take it easy on those papers. Can?t have those equations equaling the empty set.
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Note to all douche bags, unless you enjoy being mad limp as a dirty, used up dishrag: Do not mess with Santa Claus (Satan Claws) because you will learn to regret it. Warning delivered, enough said!


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    Santa will come down his chimney and shove him up it.

reply by nomi338 on 06-Dec-2019
    A fitting punishment for a very naughty boy.
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For a one-scene script, you have several different scenes. I think you'd be safe in calling each section a separate scene. Turns out Pez is making a pretty good Santa. Red is so evil. He seems to delight in tormenting Ned, taking every opportunity to make him look like a dummy. It looks like Red is going to get his comeuppance, though. You made a good move to keep Ned mostly out of the scene. It can be too much for an actor if he has to be on every minute of the play. judi


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Thanks, Judi. Ned?s piece would be an inset that I should say is lighted while Pez and Red go still and are shadowed.
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Well Red got his come-up-ance for being such a mean bully and evil doer. A good take on A Christmas Carol, Bill.
Ned is a good guy, maybe a little slow but that's not his fault. Well done. Nancy:)


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    Thanks, Nancy
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WOW! Haven't heard Pipi referred to since Moses was a boy LOL. This is a well penned script and seems to be moving along at a good pace toward the finish line. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Thank you, MA
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It'll be interesting to see red's blast from the past. Maybe they can figure out why he is the way he is. Your script is well-written, interesting. Your plot characters and dialogue seem believable. Nicely done.


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    Thanks, MD
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That's all? You can add more than that. Let's go to Ned's house...NOW! I have to add two more lines or this won't count, and you didn't give me anything to talk about, Scrooge. Grrr... :)


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Do you want Ned to say, ?God bless us every one? ?

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 06-Dec-2019
    Do you?

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    Yes.
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This is an interesting script and I want to see what happens next. I love your characters names as shortened versions of other names. This is very well written. Great job and thank you for sharing.


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    Thanks, Heather
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Interesting. We seemed to have left Ned in the land of "A Wonderful Life" and now Red has entered into Dickensian Christmas Carol. How will it all play out?


 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019



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    I don?t hold much hope out for Red.
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These are real men at a shop playing Santa? I have to say I am a bit confused as to the whole meaning of this piece. Although that being said the dialog did bounce around evenly and nicely.

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 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
    This is part eight, so the characters and their interactions are already established. Thanks for giving this a look, Mia.
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