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5-7-5 poem.

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Kace
 
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Joy certainly is portable and there isn't enough of it these days. We live in "joyful hope of the coming of the Spirit." I wish you well in the 5-7-5 contest my friend. Blessings for the Festive Season.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
    Thank you and I am sorry for the delayed reply.My family has suffered a lot of grief due to the untimely death of a beloved person.
    May this year bring you health and happiness.

reply by Aussie on 07-Jan-2020
    In sympathy with you, I lost my partner of 30 yrs in Oct. Blessings, Kay XX

reply by Aussie on 16-Jan-2020
    We are both grieving my friend.
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country ranch writer
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It doesn't take much to make someone happy a smile or two, a few kind words,maybe a few dollars to by a meal, or a donation during the holidays.


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
    Thank you very much Sorry for the delayed reply and wishh you a happy and peaceful year ahead.
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Sharon Haiste
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I think this is is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Writing Prompt.
Your short verse cleverly tells of loves portability.
Nicely done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Dancemom
 
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This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and a nice happy message. Great job and thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Therese Caron
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This is a great poem, particularly when only allowed 17 syllables. I find them challenging and fun when I try to write them. The words of the poem are lovely, and the image is perfect. Great 575 poem.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Janice Canerdy
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this charming,
creatively-composed poem. By symbolically treating joy as a tangible commodity to be carried about, you have conveyed an uplifting message about spreading joy to others.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Nice message in a poem. Good daily reminder about how to spread a bit of happiness everywhere we go. Good repeat with joy. Well thought out. Good luck in the contest :)


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much.
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rama devi
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Fantastic advice in this true-to-form 5-7-5. Well voiced. The flow is good but slightly awkward between the last two lines. May I offer some punctuation advice to sculpt a smoother cadence?

Wherever you go
take joy with you to deal out--
joy is portable

OR

Wherever you go,
take joy with you to deal out.
Joy is portable...

OR

Wherever you go
take joy with you to deal out
Joy is portable


Just some thoughts!

Joy is indeed portable, and communicable!

Love and Namaste,
rd


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much .you are right 'take' is a much more suitable word than 'carry'. I will make the correction.

reply by rama devi on 11-Dec-2019
    Happy to help!
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the things we carry with us wherever we go. Our personality, heart ache, or joy. We have a choice which one we will embrace and improve.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Brenda Henderson
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Excellent sentiment and very practical too! Definitely taking joy with you will make every trip more pleasurable! I really appreciated the artwork that you have chosen here. The smile on the girl is contagious. Well done!


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much

reply by Brenda Henderson on 11-Dec-2019
    You're very welcome!

reply by Brenda Henderson on 14-Jan-2020
    You're very welcome!
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