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Haiku(snow-tipped mtns. stand)


winter's lack of vivid colors

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June Sargent
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Sometimes the lack of color makes it more outstanding. Which is probably why women wear that little black dress on dates- to stand out in the crowd of color. I like this piece and the dramatic artwork. And, I wear black a lot...lol


 Comment Written 15-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    June,

    Thanks for your review and comments of this Haiku. You are indeed correct about the lack of color - and I just edited my text to black type based on that comment! Little black dresses are classy for sure.

    Mark
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I do love Haikus. This one is well done. You've done a good job
of bringing up a vivid image. Your artwork is perfect. I look forward to reading your next poem.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Thanks Barbara !

    So pleased you liked this Haiku. My go to style is most exclusively 5-7-5. The difficulty in writing the Classical Japanese Haiku is creating that 'aha moment' (sartori). I strive to do, but it is difficult to consistently achieve.

    I try to use FanArt artwork whenever I can, but I am not pleased with how the FS search engine often provides unlikely artwork matches for the word searched on.

    If you want to see more Haiku, consider visiting: theHaikuFoundation.org web site. It is a no-fee site. In the last six months, some of my Haiku has peen posted. There is no feedback or stars earned for the same - just personal satisfaction that your Haiku was selected.
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This is very well done Mark!! The perfect photo enhances your verse that is simply a perfect Haiku in form and delivery. I really enjoyed this.

Melissa


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    THANKS Melissa for that extra star! So pleased that this one affected you so positively. I am most honored to receive this accolade from you.

    Early wishes for a happy holiday season.

    Mark
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The words in this Haiku paint a very vivid winter picture, it made me feel very cold as I was reading it. Very well chosen artwork which really enhances it. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Jen,

    So pleased you enjoyed my imagery. Thanks too for your good wishes.

    Mark
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Nicely written post.
I couldn't find any grammatical errors.
Its written in a way which evokes depth and holds a meaningful message.
Happy holidays
Leanna


 Comment Written 13-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Leanna,

    Thanks for your comments and holiday greetings. Pleased you liked my post's imagery. 5-7-5 is my go-to poem style. Writing or reviewing longer verses is not in my poetic wheelhouse.

    Mark

reply by LeannaP on 14-Dec-2019
    Your welcome
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No, not a perfect match, but your words paint a wonderful picture for the mind's eye so the reader gets a great two-for-one deal on images for the day!! ;) ) Thanx for sharing, sir!! ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 13-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Yvette,

    So pleased you enjoyed my unmatched poem presentation (-; I agree that they can stand on their own. The photograph of that Half Dome is only outdone by the majestic sight of seeing the same in person!

    Mark
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This is a beautiful haiku. Some people only consider nature looking beautiful when there's a bright blue sky, there perhaps a few clouds scudding by. I live near mountains and I've had many vacations on the ocean. Both are sometimes at their most beautiful when the sky is dark and gray. Lovely words, gorgeous image, can you follow the Haiku rules perfectly. Great job!


 Comment Written 13-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
    Therese,
    THANK YOU for a very nice review and thoughtful comments. Believe it or not, I was thinking of using 'scud' instead of 'race' but decided it might to be too obscure a word for some FS readers. So I kept it simple (-:

    Mark

    P..S. I live in NYS and we have all the mountains, lakes, and beaches where clouds do often scud by (-;

reply by Therese Caron on 13-Dec-2019
    I live on NYS also, on Lake Champlain.
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Vivid imagery with only 17 syllables to work with. I like the starkness of the visuals, storm raging around an object defined by its immovability and timelessness.

Well done all around


 Comment Written 13-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
    With your name moniker, you best understood the emotion(s) displayed in my verse. THANKS!

    My main poetry mode is 5-7-5 syllabled verses but I strive to write more traditional Japanese Haiku.

    Mark
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A very well-written haiku about he snow-tipped mountains that stand out in their black, grey, and white colour tones to remind us of winter's lack of color and the consolation prize is heaps of snow.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
    Sandra,

    If you belief in the myth that that Aleutians have many words for 'snow,' then the winter snow has multi colors (-;

    In my mind, snow is either white or 'dirty white- grey.' LOL

    Thanks for your review and stars for my post.

    Mark
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simply lovely
you express your feelings and it was very touching
this was a well penned poem
it was an honor to read your work
thank you for sharing


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
    Thanks donette for the honor you shared with me on this a Haiku. I appreciate your stars too.

    Mark
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