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John Shane & The Dairy Farmer

Humorous western script

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J.T. Blossom
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I could visualize this well on a stage. Some very funny lines without rubbing people the wrong way too badly. Seems costumes would be important for this one!


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
    Yes, period costumes! Thank you for your review.
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CC,

hahaha It seems that John and Shorty get into all kinds of situations, don't they? I hadn't thought about it, but I guess I didn't realize popcorn was available back in the West. haha I write Westerns, also. Haven't ever given popcorn one thought. Very interesting! Thank you!

Nicely done and entertaining. Loved the image of those guys pulling the cow prop across the stage with a rope. Fun!


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
    Thank you for reviewing today!
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Hard to believe someone in 1896 Wyoming has never milked a cow. i wonder what the fascination with popcorn is. Interesting script, are you taking it further? Or is this a one-shot deal?


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
    Well, Shorty is from Kansas City or back east. This is a little prequel to a longer script I might post after the holidays. There were two other short scripts using those characters I posted earlier called "John Shane Gets A Sidekick" and "Maurice de Fleess" where they meet a French fur trapper. Thanks for reviewing!
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Great work with this. I enjoyed the dialog and you did a great job with the dialect. The Swedish were such wonderful settlers in the U.S. How fortunate that John and Shorty met up with a dairy farmer. I'm glad Swen had Jersey cows. My dad always had Jerseys. You have a clever way of showing the cows, too. Very enjoyable, and I'm glad you're writing scripts. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed more of your work, but it seems like things always come up that prevent me for reviewing as much as I'd like to. judi


 Comment Written 15-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Thank you so much for the six-star review! I only post one to three times a week anyway, so you are probably not behind :)

reply by judiverse on 15-Dec-2019
    You're welcome. I can't keep up with those who post twice a day! judi
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I enjoyed your script, CC. Your characters are hilarious in their parts. The John Wayne character is true to life. Shorty is short some brains I think. Your lines flow well with good descriptive words. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Yes, Shorty is short in more than one way. Thank you so much for reviewing today.
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Loved the farming humor for a cowboy who seems to know so little about farming. Guess he thought all cattle were male?

The dialogue was great. You did a wonderful job with the spoken accents!

Loved the misunderstanding on how Farmer Sven acquired his farm. (I suspect that Sven's father knew exactly what he was doing!)

Great job!


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Thank you bunches for your astute review!
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I chuckled my way through this and enjoyed the Swedish dialogue, and particularly the choice of name for the dairy farmer. I didn't pick up anything that needed correction.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Thank you bunches for reviewing today.
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Ummmmmm... I am completely and udderly taken aback. Did that cow just tip over when I tried to milk her?
Waddaya mean, it were not a cow?

Hahahaha. Okay, that's it, done pulling your leg. (But I am still flamboozled...)


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Thank you for reviewing today!

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 14-Dec-2019
    My pleasure. :)
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This is a well-written, interesting script. The dialogue seems realistic and your characters seem like quite characters, really come to life. I love the added humor. thanks for the laugh.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Thank you very much for reviewing and the specific comments.
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I really enjoyed reading your script and the fun western/Scandinavian dialogue you used. The theme was fun and was clever to use in the humor. Well done... wish I had a six star for your... tis that good. :)

Melissa


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Aw, thanks for the review! A virtual six-star makes me smile.
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