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Quest for the Neckulet


Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Savaecus Village"

Radolf searches for the neckulet

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royowen
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So the company bumped into Vidad's cousin when fighting with them, as they were strangers to Vidad's original home, they are hosted and entertained for the night, and find information that Vidad's brother? Were part of the mob that murdered Radolf's grandmother and stole the neckulette. An excellent Episode, blesskngs, Roy
Typo : Well have to make (due) with what we have. Do?


 Comment Written 13-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your review, great rating, and catch.

    Karlene

reply by royowen on 14-Dec-2019
    OK
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Well written, strong dialogue that carries the reader throughout the chapter. A very inviting creation to follow, not easy with the cast of characters you have presented. Continued success!


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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene
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Not too bad when it comes to the flow of the story. Each of the characters played their part well enough. What I felt jarring was the mind speak between Anarra and Radolf. You jumped from POV without a break. While omniscient can be done, it is not the most popular of the forms any more, I would be careful when using it.


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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your review.

    Karlene
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This appears to be a pivotal chapter. Vidal had a warm homecoming. (how good!) and they found out the WHO of the theft. I also liked how you handled the differing customs.


 Comment Written 13-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene

reply by Darlene Franklin on 13-Dec-2019
    You're welcome, Karlene.

reply by Darlene Franklin on 13-Dec-2019
    You're welcome, Karlene.
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None i hope. The sorceress sipped her tea.
My favorite line.
I found this strike a little bit of ambiguity but it works well as a unique body of art.
Nicely written


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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene

reply by LeannaP on 13-Dec-2019
    Your welcome
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