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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Thought for today: Raising Kids:"

I was asked to write my bio in 1975 and this is it

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Rosemary Everson1
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I enjoyed your story. Raising kids by yourself is very trying. You did a good job. I'm so sorry that your husband is no longer around, we have lots of that happening in our states, too. God Bless you!


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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
    Thank you for taking the time to review my post.
    Your words of encouragement are helpful.
    thanks again.
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Kleck 140 you have done a great job and I love the practical solutions you employed. Raising seven kids on your own, it appears you've done a fantastic job. I can see the title for your book now. Surviving Seven Kids and Staying Sane. Based on what I've read here, I'd buy it.
Great work.


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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
    You made me chuckle and I needed that boost today.
    The title of my book will be "If You Only Knew"
    Thanks a bunch for stopping by to review my post.
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This is the first chapter I have read. I then went back to your first chapter to start at the beginning. I plan to read the other chapters also. Wow! What a story you have to tell! I admire your strength!


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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
    I am an accountant and registered tax preparer therefore I don't have confidence in writing. Your review has given me a boost in that. Thanks for your kind words.

reply by dkblack on 21-Dec-2019
    You are welcome!
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This is a great piece, I really enjoyed reading it. Your characters are very interesting and the stories they are caught up in are shocking yet so real. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day


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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
    Thanks you for taking the time t review my posting.
    And those six stars are what I needed to make me think I can write. As an accountant, number are my forte'. Thanks again.
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I love how you handled the playboy situation. I think this is really good on your part about teaching that everyone is an individual. Thanks for sharing this. It is so hard to raise kids. I pray a lot, I have a 20 year old. 17 and 14


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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
    I am an accountant and registered tax preparer therefore I don't have confidence in writing. Your review has given me a boost in that. Thanks for your kind words.
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I don't know what K-3 means, but you write really well. Also, I presume that your psyche professor's advice has served you well, and your primary aim of dealing with your challenges panned out. There is occasionally a little confusion of which person is actually centre stage of your story, but nothing too major. Well done.


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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
    I am an accountant and registered tax preparer therefore I don't have confidence in writing. Your review has given me a boost in that. Thanks for your kind words. K-3 is the grade level of Kindergarten 3 year old. Thanks a bunch.
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Thank you for sharing these parenting moments. It seems you did a wonderful job and with all the grace and wisdom that the Lord gave you. I'm sure your children appreciate all you did for them!


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    You are welcome
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I really enjoyed reading this piece. You describe each incident clearly, and include your thoughts and the final outcomes. It must have been incredibly hard at times. I have no doubt many people will enjoy reading your stories.


 Comment Written 15-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Thank you for reading my posting. I appreciate your words
    of encouragement.
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This is interesting writing but needs quite a bit of editing. I read the other reviews and lots of helpful suggestions have been made so I won't repeat too many of them. Speech quotation marks are a bit haphazard but easily fixed with some careful reading through. For instance, in the following:

"Could I speak to the parents please,?" I asked.
"They are out to dinner," he replied.
Who am I talking to? I asked.
"Jack," he said.
"How old are you?
"Sixteen! May I take a message?

Speech marks needed in third, fifth and sixth lines.

Double spacing between paragraphs needs to be consistent.

I admire your handling of the various issues that you've mentioned. I've given four stars but am happy to give five after some revisions.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Many revisions made. Please note I am at the K-3 level here.

reply by JudyE on 15-Dec-2019
    The writing itself is really interesting and the grammar, etc can all be learned. What I'm saying is that excellent grammar and spelling aren't much use if you don't have a good story to tell. And you have a great story to tell.

reply by JudyE on 15-Dec-2019
    The story is much improved grammar-wise. I've given five stars. Well done.

reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
    You are Welcome!
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This is a superb chapter, and I applaud your wisdom in dealing with the difficult moments as they occurred. In particular, the way you dealt with the Playboy incident was brilliant. Because I am out of this week's allotment of Sixes, please accept a "Virtual Six" rating instead.

Below are technical issues not affecting the star rating because I know you will fix them. Please tell me by PM when you do, and I'll come back and remove my relevant comments to leave you a clean review.

Section Three:

P3, s1: Andy, [who was the bully of the class]saying, =>
Andy [who was the bully of the class] saying,
[Omit comma after "Andy" and add a space after the closing bracket.]

P4, s1: want me to do?" Should => want me to do? Should
P4, s2: in the past? => in the past?"
[Move closing quotation mark from the end of s1 to the end of s2.]

P9, s1: please,?" I => please?" I
[Omit unnecessary comma.]

P11, s1: Who am I talking to? I asked. => "Who am I talking to?" I asked.
[Add quotation marks.]

P15, s1: " Yes. => "Yes.
[Omit space (typo).]

P15, s3: himself," is => himself,' is
[Change double quotation mark to single quotation mark.]

P19, s2: "Boy, My Mom => "Boy, my Mom
[Change "My" to "my" here.]

Section Four:

P1, s5: only,until => only, until
[Add missing space.]

P1, s7: decide of some => decide on some
[Typo.]

Section Five:

P4, s2: Her response was "I => Her response was, "I
[Add comma.]

Section Six:

P1, s1: years of age, => years of age.
[End this sentence here.]

P1, new s2: teenager's => teenagers'
[Change from singular possessive to plural possessive
because you are referring to two of them.]

You have improved a lot. With so many changes, it is not unusual for
some to be missed. I will stay with you until all are corrected. -- Mike


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2019
    Thanks a bunch. Revisions made and I pray I got them all.
    I am not very savvy with this computer stuff. But continue to
    learn more each time I get here. Thanks for caring.

reply by WalkerMan on 15-Dec-2019
    Yes, I see the changes and have removed all relevant comments addressed. However, some items remain, which I have left in place. When those are fixed, tell me; and I'll return again to remove the comments addressed. -- Mike
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