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The Snow Globe


A Christmas Poem

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Katherine M. Kean
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This is a very thought-provoking piece. Not just about snow globes obviously, but about how memers of society work so hard to cut themselves off from each other these days, going to any lengths. I especially like the idea from the end of the poem that there is hope that improvement will come.


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks for the six and the thorough review - much appreciated!
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What a perfect poem, dissecting the Christmas story and giving it a perfect outlet for its destined message. Yes, we are all in the snow globe with our own perspective, and yet nothing but nothing cuts through the crap to get at the reason and the atmosphere of hope, is the journey of the birth to the cross of Calvary. Well done Mark, superb rhyming entry in this contest, merry Christmas, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks, Roy. Blessings to you and yours this Christmas.

reply by royowen on 17-Dec-2019
    You too Mark
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A truly unique and wonderful offering from the world of snow globes!! ;) :) There's a few hitches in your rhythm and I've tried to point out t few, but such a cool idea, sir!! ;) :) Thanx so very much for sharing and best of luck in the contest, Mark! ;)

see, or hear, or feel --> see, hear, or feel [for rhythm...:) ]

they themselves were in a snow globe. --> they themselves were in a globe. [same...:) ]

man, in the globe, on the festive shelf at Macy's, --> man in the globe on that festive Macy's shelf, [same...: ]

That came from without, bringing light to the lonely --> It came from without and shown light there within,

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 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks so much for the thorough review and the comments on the rhythm. If you deviate from a standard meter (as I did here), rhythm gets a bit tricky - thanks for that feedback.
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-Nice artwork, Mark.
-This is a very well written poem with
a unique look withing a snow globe.
-The description is excellent, along with
the rhyme and message.
-I like the beginning when
everyone is in the snow globe.
-Then, the man in the globe
saw a special star, "Crossing over borders,
making near what once was far."
-The conclusion is very good, too,
especially the last line.
-Good luck in the contest,
and have a very Merry Christmas
and most Happy New Year!


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks Pam. I had the Twilight Zone in mind when writing this - not sure it came through - I love this review - thanks!

reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Dec-2019
    You are very welcome, Mark. Don't judge the Twilight Zone by me, as I only saw a few episodes. Too creepy for me:) I looked at it as commentary on what is going one, especially with the border reference.
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Mark this is gorgeous. I like the poem very much and especially like the phrase... making near what once was far... impactful... I would mention that in the last line the word ..Ties.. needs attention. Very well done.

Melissa

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks Melissa for the lovely review and for catching that typo - much appreciated.
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