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This is a great start to what seems to be a very chilling story. 'Punchinello', in a few short sentences is depicted as a very scary, disturbed individual. I think if ever a serial killer pops up in your part of the world I fear you will be visited be the local authorities. 'Punchinello' seems to the type of serial killer you'd see in a movie. The first sentence starts the story of a non-fiction experience, I thought. When I realized that, no, this is a fictional story, it got even scarier; and this is just the beginning, the first of what I fear will be more gruesome chapters to come. It promises to be a great story. I can't wait to read more; I look forward to it. Thank you.


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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your insights and the review.
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Very excellent description of Punchinello. He is a real psycho, and has a hate on for everyone, meteorologists included. He has specific evil designs on Sheriff Daniels. He is going to make headlines again, and not in a good way. I like that he has to listen to the efforts of people to do go, like the Clothe-a-Child campaign. This makes the reader curious to see how Punchinello is going to carry out his evil schemes. judi


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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the sixer. Decided Punchinello is what was missing from my book, so have decided to add him in. Plan to self-published this book the end of 2020. Much appreciate the review.

reply by judiverse on 31-Dec-2019
    You're very welcome. Best of luck with your book. judi
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Hi Brett, so we're back to the old story but with new names. Will it still be about Cody, I wonder. It's very well written, I have to say and I'm sure it will bring in some new readers. All best. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
    Decided the Punchinello character was what the book was missing, so adding him in before self-publishing the end of 2020. Most reviewers seem to agree with my assessment. Can not hurt to have fresh eyes read the tale one more time between now and then.

reply by Ulla on 29-Dec-2019
    I totally agree. And it works very well, I may add. :))
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What a strong way to begin your story with us knowing Punchinello's plan right up front.

If Punchinello is placing the newsman of his 'delete' list, he must have a mighty long list!

"...while he imagined carving the angelic features of her face to shreds ..." Oh, my. I had seen our Punchinello as a mere murderer. How wrong I must be!!!


 Comment Written 28-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your insights and the review.
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Good work. Are you aiming at [picking up[ some newer readers or us old ones coming around again? No spags. Punchinello is a new addition as far as I can tell. The name anyway.


 Comment Written 28-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. My plan is to finalize the book and self-publish by the end of 2020. New readers along the way would be okay as well.
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This guy sounds like a real psycho. Is there anyone he doesn't want to slice up? I have a feeling he's going to do a lot of damage before they catch him. This promises to be a good read.


 Comment Written 28-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
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I didn't read the original, but this revision shows a lot of polish. Nasty bit of work... I'm now wondering who's going to take him down! The boy in the picture? Or is he a possible victim?


 Comment Written 28-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Felt the Punchinello character was missing from my book so going back and entering him in. Plan to self-publish the book by the end of 2020.
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A new character is this nasty piece of work, this Punchinello, who seemingly wants to kill selected people he hate, including Sherrif Daniels, and the newscaster at channel 13, sounds like lovely turd. He's picked the lock to enter the sherrif's house, so now what? Well done Brett, an excellent episode, seeing through the eyes of a psychopath. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Longed to garret the breath...garrotte?


 Comment Written 28-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
    Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the catch.

reply by royowen on 28-Dec-2019
    Welcome Brett
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A very sick little man, I see. :) :) But what a great intro to really 'hook' your reading in Brett -- great job! ;) Thanx so much for sharing, Brett -- look forward to reading chapt 2! ;) Yvette



 Comment Written 28-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
    When I read your review, I wanted to scream. But, you are correct on all recommendations. THANKS!

reply by Y. M. Roger on 28-Dec-2019
    You are so very welcome! ;) I have updated my review/rating based on your changes -- Happy New Year!! ;) ;) Yvette
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