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Pearl Edwards
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A great free verse contrasting between the fireworks all around the world to celebrate the end of one decade and the beginning of another and the devastation and destruction of the fires on our continent.
in shock, and silence stand,
like rocks on sand, - emotional lines. I think that would have been terrifying.
cheers, Jim.
valda


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
    My biggest sorrow with this poem is that so few reviewers have seen beyond the fireworks and commented on the Australian tragedy. Thank you, not only for the the review and six stars but for picking up on that aspect of the poem.
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Thank you for introducing us to these distant Pacific islands. I admired your social commentary with your use of "incontinent" and "arsonist". Cheers- Joan


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
    Thank you s o much for this review. I always struck me as odd that these islands should be so close and yet a day apart.
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Well written free verse which goes for the controlled danger of fireworks to celebrate to the wild fires which destroy land and lives. Then it returns to the fireworks. It is circular like life is circular.
Keep writing
Joan


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Thanks for being one a a very few wh have noted the double subject of this. Most only saw the fireworks.

reply by dragonpoet on 04-Jan-2020
    You're welcome. I found the double meaning obvious.
    Joan
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A very well-written poem celebrating New Year from wherebit starts in the Pacific in Karibati until it ends hours later on Tutuila in the Pacific moving from east to west covering the whole earth.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Thank you for reading and reviewing
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I did not know that those two islands were the first and last to start the day. Thank you for taking us around the globe showing us the tension between man and Nature during the New Year's celebrations.

Looking forward to learning from you in class!


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Thank you for being one of the few wo perceived the point behind this. So many reviewers saw only fireworks.
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This is a terrific free verse, Jim. Comparing and contrasting fire works with the dreadful fires everywhere and particularly Australia is most apt. And yes how terribly correct your use of the wind as an accelerant while the sky is illuminated with fireworks.

I still think we should use one time zone around the world. It wouldn't take long to adjust. I hope Australia gets some relief soon.

Always a pleasure to read your work. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Thank you for being one of the very few who saw anything beyond fireworks in this poem.

reply by Gloria .... on 04-Jan-2020
    I almost missed the fireworks to tell you the truth, if it wasn't for your mention of Samoa being the first. Great poem. :)
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I though you were writing about our wild fires for a moment. I suppose it could refer equally to fire works too, and it's funny how some countries/islands have chosen which side of the timeline they want to dwell on, Your word power is amazing, sometimes it's hard to scrabble through the pebbles, but well done, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
    It was both celebratory new year fireworks and your wildfires kind of simultaneously -- fire under and out control. Thanks for struggling with it -- not the easiest of poems , just words hopefully creating a series of images.

reply by royowen on 04-Jan-2020
    Good job
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Exceptional
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Book-ended by location, your wildly focused description of the end of a decade and the beginning of a new one takes us around the globe. For some it is a celebration, for others it is the end of the world as they knew it.
Your poem is rich with personification in alliterative phrases depicting the horrors with acute observations and atmospheric language. It is a truly graphic poem.
As an ex-pat Aussie I am deeply grieved; this has affected several of my friends in south coast NSW.


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
    Thank you for this six star review. I am so pleased that someone has picked up on he conflicting imagery here.

reply by LisaMay on 03-Jan-2020
    I was intrigued that few reviewers mentioned the Aussie fire drama.

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    It amazed me how few people picked up on the whole point of the poem. Perhaps they only looked at the picture.

reply by LisaMay on 04-Jan-2020
    ...or only read the first stanza. People have got such short attention spans these days.
    I loved your poem's title, too.

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Thank you. The incorrect pronunciation of 'decade's is another thing that gets to me. Bring back Latin in schools, I say.

reply by LisaMay on 04-Jan-2020
    I did Latin in high school. It has served me well with having a wide vocabulary.
    (Our Latin teacher in Australia was Irish with an extremely broad accent - I have no idea how Latin is supposed to sound; we could barely make sense of what he was saying!)

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    It should be DECade from the Latin DECem = ten. Too many people these days pronounce it deCADE as if it were decayed.

reply by LisaMay on 04-Jan-2020
    Then I've always pronounced it correctly. I knew DECA was ten. If I ever meet any Roman centurion decathletes they won't sneer at my pronunciation.
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There a complicated structure for you! I love the innovative rhyming and the mirror-effect of endless flipping forward until time catches up. As for fireworks, for the second year running we had very few. I used to hear them going off over in town, and the dogs would start busy-trotting and barking. Not so much as a yip this time.


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
    Many thanks for struggling with the complexities of this.
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Near epic rendering of a decade dismissed for its many faults. But the celebration comes through for a more optimistic new try and rolls through the time zones. I can feel both the celebration and the dismissal--that's life. I very much enjoyed it. Well done.


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
    Many thanks for struggling with the complexities of this somewhat obscure piece,
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