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The Pitches


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From the Ashes -- Pallas
A very complex and comprehensive plot you've written here here. I like your characters, they seem to have a negative ancestry, and it seems to me, if just one decides to break that cycle, it would an exponentially large change to the descendants, perhaps Pallas will break the mould, well done Bill, fascinating story, blessings, Roy
Typo : Ensured(.) (H)e never left...


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
    Thanks for the excellent review, Roy. Those really are two separate sentences. I see how they could be misinterpreted.

reply by royowen on 07-Feb-2020
    Just trying to do my job Bill, sorry I annoyed you.

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
    Sorry if I seemed annoyed, Roy. I should probably fix those sentences to make the meaning clear. Your help is always appreciated.

reply by royowen on 07-Feb-2020
    Bless you Bill.
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Prison Visit
This is the only chapter I've read but it makes me want to go back and read more from the beginning. I love those names! I thought Pez was a nickname for something else. It sounds like something that could be true or at least based on the truth. I enjoyed reading this.


 Comment Written 03-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Thanks, Susan
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Prison Visit
Ha, ha this is terrific, Bill. The names you pick are perfect for delivering some not so subtle humour, and those congo visits seems to have amounted a tummy full of soccer ball.

And of course Peril is innocent. Everybody in prison is innocent, aren't they?

A very fun read and you are giving us much more background on Pez. He's growing up fast. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Thank you, Gloria. I?ve wanted to get to this point all along. Now it?s established how Pez and Pallas are brothers separated by ten years. I think one last chapter should tie this up.

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Twenty years.
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Good Lord, what a family! Named after a candy dispenser... you know I never really thought about it. I love the way Pallas got his name... or is he a she?... named after a pack of cigarettes after all. You're just too much! LOL :)


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the effervescent review, Susan.
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Good thing the Pitches ain't snitches, cause they might get stitches, and get called a bunch of bitches, be forced to cast a bunch of spells like a coven of evil witches. Are you sick of this thread? I am LOL.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    I got the itches.

reply by nomi338 on 01-Feb-2020
    Stop it. LOL.
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What a visit. Find out his dad is married and expecting another kid. I just hope he's a better dad to this one than Pez but the way it sounds I doubt he will be. Your story is well-written, interesting, realistic.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Pez and Pallas are brothers from scripts I wrote before. They are 40 and 20 years old in 2020, which is why this story is at the new millennium.
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Prison Visit
"Prison Visit'
Is a chapter in your book entitled "The Pitches"
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
It also, was rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Thanks, Ricky
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Prison Visit
Gum dispenser? You mean the candy dispenser, right? I only knew Pez candies not gum. Ah, poor Pez. He's pretty smart considering his gene pool. So that's his relationship to Pallas. Good dialogue and can't imagine how a gal like Sabata would want to be hooked up with Peril.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Now I need a Pez aspirin dispenser.
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Prison Visit
I bet them baby will be called 'Pitches' now! LOL. What a shock for Pez, his dad's remarried, he has a step-mum, pregnant step-mum, lol. I'm sure they will all get along just fine. This was a really good part, Bill, and what a revelation! I can't wait to read what the next part brings. Well done! :)) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Thanks. Sandra. This will be the last with Peril Pitch I'm afraid. I'll likely wrap this up in the next chapter.

reply by sandramitchell on 01-Feb-2020
    Aw, I'll miss the story, but perhaps you'll start some more with Ned and Pons? They are classics!
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Prison Visit
Nicely written! Good imagery. That sounds like an inevitable train wreck about to happen. I like how you implied what the guy is in for but didn't directly state it. Keeps people guessing.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Thanks, Tami, for giving this a look. This is chapter seven of the story. Peril shot up a restaurant as payback for a syndicate set up ten years prior to this chapter. That incident has been leapt over in favor of this eventuality.
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