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The Legend of John Shane


Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "A2S1 Legend of John Shane"

Musical melodrama

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Good help is hard to find, especially in a comedy. They have to foul up so we can laugh at them. And if they are none too bright, that can make it even funnier. I look forward to the next act.


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2020



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    Thank you so much for reviewing!
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Great 'bumbling' comedy between your outlaws, Crystie! ;) And, oh, dear, a rescue by the bumbling dotes of the county?! ;) This can have no good ending to it, ya know?! :) LOL! ;) And wonder what that Cole is up to.... :) Thanx for sharing and look forward to the next! ;) Yvette


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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
    Thank you for reading and reviewing, Yvette.
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I think they will be surprised when they find out Willie has sung like a canary.

I don't believe I'd be making any smart remarks to Big Marty.

This bunch of henchmen are a bit stupid. Like you said, can't get good or intelligent help these days. lol


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2020



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    Thank you so much for reviewing!
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Your characters' names are great. This reminds me of some of the melodramas the group I once performed with used to put on. The three outlaws Cole has working for him don't seem very bright. Willie has to be rescued. It's humorous the way she was captured. Big Marty seems the most trusted of Cole's henchmen. This moves along at a great pace, and the characters are clearly presented. The three stooges are funny, but they try to follow orders. Great work. judi


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
    Thank you bunches for reviewing. I read a more successful local playwright/actor's scripts first before writing this one back around 2006. He is branching out to do something related to Native American issues this month, instead of his forte in comedy improv and humorous scripts. Big Marty is more trusted, yes, because he is the most skilled when it comes to gunfighting.

reply by judiverse on 18-Jan-2020
    You're welcome. I think you're onto something with your scripts. This to me sounds like a melodrama, with the villain and the hero. The names you've chosen fall into that category. Much success to you. judi
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This scene's a little bit confusing what happened to Marry ann, and what is the fuss about big talking?
Did they kill the cows? That will be against cowboy nature. Maybe the next scene will clarify the confusion


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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
    Yes, always more to come until the end. I think they found a secluded corral. Thanks for reviewing!
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So it's back to Cole Black, and bunch of nasties, and now they're going to try and rescue Willie, but I think they get some sort of resistance from John, Shorty and I don't think that John and co, are going to give up without a fight. Well done Crystie, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2020



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    Thank you for reviewing.

reply by royowen on 18-Jan-2020
    Well done
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Great scene! Mr. Cole is a strong villain character. I like how he got angry at them, and Pete clapped Ivan on the shoulder and said "I knew we could do it." Lol that was funny. You're characters have great chemistry with each other. Awesome scene!


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2020



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    Thank you for reviewing.
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