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Little Toddler Lies


A two year old lies about a personal adventure

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RPSaxena
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Hello Carl DeVere,
MARVELOUS piece of General Non-Fiction BEAUTIFULLY depicting its theme.
Impressive, and perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Superb!
Best of Luck!!


 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
    Thank you for your review and such exceptional support. Much appreciated.

reply by RPSaxena on 30-Jan-2020
    Carl DeVere, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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A very well-written story about a lie and adventure that could have gone terribly wrong and luckily it didn't and you can tell the story. I am looking after my one year old grandson during the day and I don't let him out of my sight for one second.


 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
    Thank you so much for your review. Indeed watch the young lad carefully. They are more capable than most expect. And who knows what they are thinking?
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I can hardly recall anything from those early days of my life, so it's surprising that you can remember that far back. But I can remember developing guile at a very early, although my elder child was genuinely guileless, but the younger one, full of it. Well done Carl, an excellent read, good luck, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 25-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
    Thank you for your review Roy and for observing that everyone is just a bit different...seemingly. It's only an illusion though for the most part since we all are basically the same. I think that I remember so well because it was so dramatic in a good way. In your early life things were dramatic in awful ways--you may have shut them out. Just guessing.

reply by royowen on 25-Jan-2020
    That?s true
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I can believe it - my husband tells of going to the RR tracks to see the BIG engines. His Mom found him there. Another friend's son was lost for a time - found him at the tracks. They are mighty quick, these two year olds.
Good story.


 Comment Written 24-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
    Thank you so much for your review and comments. I think that two-year-olds have more confidence in themselves than one would expect--probably because they have not suffered as much of life yet. and they inherently know enough to stay out of danger. But they do make mistakes as do the rest of us.
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A truly interesting story! I can't imagine a two year old even having enough understanding of where to go and how to get there and back! Your guardian angel must have been working over time to keep you safe that day!
Great story!
Patty


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
    A guardian angel is a great possibility in this case. I was infatuated with big ships that sailed by in view of our tiny trailer park from a distance all the time. My first words, according to my mom much later were, "Big Boat." I was obsessed with the need for a closer look at docking. This contest is still on with some other interesting stories. Thank you for your review.
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I am amazed that you can remember anything as young as two years old. I don't at all. Well written and I see nothing to edit. The detail is remarkable. Good luck in this contest entry. It was a perfect lie....to this day!


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
    Pulled one over on Grandma for sure. I think that my memory is so good because of all the dramatic events of living in that tiny trailer park. We had to evacuate once as a hurricane approached and a tree fell on our trailer. Thank you for your review.

reply by Supe on 24-Jan-2020
    you are welcome. I enjoyed it.
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hello there, my friend, wow, that was quite a story. What an adventure that had to be for such a young one. It was probably even more exciting knowing you got away with it. That's funny that you say your brothers still don't believe you. lol. Thanks so much for sharing this. Good luck!
~Kerry


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
    My brothers have had children that age and judge me by their children and themselves. I understand the difficulty in believing this tale, but it did happen as I have written. I think that it well illustrates my interest in writing: to deal with things that are hard to understand and yet still use a lot of humor. Thank you for your review.

reply by Kerry Robinson on 30-Jan-2020
    My pleasure, my friend.
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That is quite a story. When you are so young, you don't really know what
dangers await you. You take on more daring acts. Good entry for the contest. Good luck.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
    I remember having some sense of danger, but I think that it was more about being caught. I have recently edited this as the contest is still on and it's in a tight race with a couple other good stories. Thank you for you review and comments.
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Dear Mystery Writer,

I have an 18-month-old grand-daughter who spends some part of near-every day with me. I can easily see her wanting to go do this. I KNOW she would happily attempt it. *smile* I'm trying to decide if she could get away with it -- and I don't think so. But then, like I said, she's still six months younger than you were. She's still not as agile and 'sturdy' on her feet. But, my oh my, she is into EVERYTHING. She's curious as a cat.

Into, over, under, around, etc. I get it.

This was fun and well presented - though terrifying. Glad you are safe. Thanks and good luck!


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
    Thank you for your review. I'm about to edit that piece and address the reason for the fascination which has been lacking until now. Many people have acknowledged the inclination of the very young, but like yourself and my brothers, doubted the ability. Agility, like every other human characteristic--varies from person to person. Keep a close eye on your granddaughter's whereabouts... they also do fail tragically.
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A great entry for this contest - a believable story about the kind of thing I would have done :) I wouldn't have had any remorse about the lie - at the time -only in retrospect. I enjoyed your story telling. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
    Thank you for your review. I've had many similar comments--"I would have done it, and not regretted it" I'm editing the work right now and adding why the fascination--what was the motivation.

reply by Minglement on 23-Jan-2020
    You're welcome. I was a hyperactive kid before they had a name for it besides brat. Always had to go where my curiosity led me, learn everything the hard way :)
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