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Stories of the Dreamtime


Aboriginal myths and legends.

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Rating of Chapter 12 - Dingo Dreamtime
I liked the way you sort of split the story, you addressed what the island was like now according to the dingo Kirree, then what the land was like before it was discovered by white man and then you went back to the thoughts of Kirree only with the update regarding the Sanctuary. Very enjoyable, good reading flow, thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    The Dingo is a protected wild dog on Fraser Island. The Butchella tribe own the land. The island is called K'Gari (Fraser Island) I did write a lengthy story about it's beginnings up to today. It has take this long for the elders to be given back K'Gari. Maybe you can find it, I don't think it is part of my The Book Stories of the Dreamtime. The island it a huge tourist spot, now, the elders can reap the benefits of tourismn. Thanks so much KXX

reply by aryr on 22-Aug-2018
    I know you wrote something about the history of the island, it being taken away then finally given back and of the sanctuary or the wildlife reserve. I remember because I found that so interesting.

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    Tis one of my favorite places. K'Gari welcomes everyone XXK.
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Rating of Chapter 11 - Jayawah's Terrible Lesson.
I found it interesting that the sun and moon were addressed as family, which is our way as well. Again it was a good lesson of listening to one's elders and respecting them. Although the twins were now basically rejected by the older tribe, they put what they learned to good use in teaching others. Very well done, thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay.
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Rating of Chapter 9 - The Magic Billabong.
I love the morale of each story I have read so far. Similar stories were taught to me as a child, different animals but the thought process was the same. Good overcame evil, kindness beget kindness, greed beget greed. Thanks so much for sharing these. I will call it quits for today. (smile).


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Hello my friend, Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed. I think we have similiar tales between tribes. Have a good day.
    Blessings, Kay.

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    Blessings Kay, I do believe so.
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Rating of Chapter 8 - Dolphin Dreaming.
Another wise lesson. A shame that the three children disobeyed their elders and paid a hefty price for doing so. I liked the story in that they were rescued as dolphins and it is interesting how many times when dolphins are seen that they are in threes. Well done. I remember many years ago one of our elders calmly said to a young boy who was rambunctious, adventurous etc. 'Why do you think all of us elders got to be so old?' The young boy had no clue. 'Because we listened to our elders as they did before that. Elders grow old and wise because we listen.' Well done thanks for sharing.


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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Thank you for reading, glad you enjoyed. I live near the sea and we have the season of the Humpback whales. They come to birth in the warm waters. And yes, dolphins are often in threesomes. Blessings, Kay.

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    I am sure you enjoy the beauty the whales and dolphins provide.

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    We have just had the Whale Festival. People go out on boards, form a circle and give thanks for the whales journey back home. Neat eh?

reply by aryr on 22-Aug-2018
    Wow, that what the Wiccans do during the fall sightings on the Atlantic side. Our circle is more of a spiral rather than a circle.
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Rating of Chapter 7 - The Selfish Spear Maker.
This was a good chapter which taught a great lesson to the Jacarei people by the spirit teacher. It is indeed a thoughtful process to give a gift because then ones heart is filled with the joy of doing so rather than anger and the wish to harm others. Such wisdom. Ironically the Jacarei were a nation of fishermen as were the people of my tribe and as was Christ. Mmmm, perhaps the white man did not learn his lessons after all. Well done, thanks for sharing.


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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Hello Sister, That is what we call each other in tribal talk. Glad you enjoyed. I wrote these for young people. Cheers XXX

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    Then blessings sister. I am sure even oldies like me found them interesting.

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    Are you older than me? I'm 73 next month!

reply by aryr on 22-Aug-2018
    No but I am close to you lol, I am 70.
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Rating of Chapter 6 - Bone Magic
Wow, this was intensely enlightening. There a definitely similarities to the beliefs of the Aborigines and of the Native American Indians. Also similar are the treatments of the Peoples, the cruelties, the harshness, the shame and belittlement. Countries so far away yet infested by the white man's ways. (I am going to bookcase this if you don't mind.) Thank you so much for sharing.


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Way back when the whites were just infiltrating our ancestors, the magic man of the tribe pointed a bone at an enemy. White or black eventually died. Today, tribal blacks live in the Northern Territories and when a member has done something very bad, he is speared in the leg - no more bone magic!

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    Gosh darn, just a spear to the leg. Hey that is bad enough, I am glad there is no more bone magic.

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    The times they are changing!
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Rating of Chapter 5 - Sweet Water Child
This was indeed a story of good conquering evil. Young Dania was lured by the evil Meribah, but her sense of goodness, of caring and understanding surpassed his evil. He lost the battle, she may have lost her life but she lives on in the tales and in the goodness. Very, very well done, thanks so much for sharing.


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    This I remember was one of my favorites to write and I got just the right photo. Readers loved it. I think it was one of my best stories. How about you start your own book called Tales of My Forefathers?? If you keep it to short stories (as I did) more will read same. Americans were fascinated with Australian culture that I wrote about (haven't added any more of late.)

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    This was indeed a special one, awwww you should add to them. (smile)
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Rating of Chapter 4 - The Bora Ring.
This was once again a fantastic chapter. It was very educational in describing the activities and the life style of the tribe. It was a great shame that Gindee was so self centered, selfish and did not learn the true values that had been given to him. It provided the basis for so many truths. Thanks so much for sharing.


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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    The bora ring is still evident today. Ceremonies are held in sacred places. Coroberres they are called. For boys becoming men (their chest is scarred) bird dances for rain, birth celebrations and giving Bahaime thanks for food etc.

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    As it should be, life and progress should be celebrated.
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Rating of Chapter 3 - Wishes come True.
I did so like this story Kay, it demonstrated the desire to put others first, which is truly the way of life. The young boy could have easily asked for healing for himself but instead he asked for peace within his tribe. He put others first which in his mind was more important. He had found peace among the elders away from his tormentors. I liked the morale of this one, thanks for sharing.


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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    You are most welcome my friend.

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    Keep writing.
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Rating of Chapter 2 - The Googarh Twins
Rather enjoyable to read despite the topic ( I don't do well with anything regarding snakes-Yuk). I did learn a lot from reading this as did the twins. First they were definitely new animals for me, so their habits were interesting. Second, it was great that the mother who lost her eggs adopted them- it is the way of nature and of life. Well done, thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Yalunga the rainbow serpent was sent by Great Spirit to make the lands inhabitle for the tribes. He was gigantic spirit snake. Made rivers, hills and dales. When the spirits had finished making the lands they disappeared into the gum trees. That is why we call the trees ghost gums today. XX

reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    Wow, that's interesting.
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