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Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Burning Bed"

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Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written heartfelt story. I can understand what you've gone through. I had a cheating husband with drinking habits and I wished often that I could do something to finally get him out of my life, the third cheat was his last I took my three kids and go a thousand miles away before he got home from work.


 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    That was the way to go to get away, I am honored to know you understand. Thank you
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This is also a hard story to read, knowing that it's happening in a lot of households. I have a friend who went through something similar, when he eventually started on one of her sons, that is when she left. You were very brave Barb, and certainly don't have anything to apologise about. Thanks for sharing,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Thank you so much, there is still more going on even with shelters
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Hello Barb Hensongispsaca
Yes, your story was difficult to read, why? my father was an alcoholic. And when he got angry would end up punching my moter.
So I understand of how you felt when you were writing your story. The best to you in this contest.
Gert


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Your review made my day, even though it was so long ago, it still gives me a warm fuzzy to know someone understands. Thank you

reply by Gert sherwood on 02-Feb-2020
    You are welcome Barb
    Gert
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Barb,

Wow. Just when I think you have said and done it all, you shock me with something like this. I grew up in a 'crooked little house', so I get it. I am so sorry you've had to experience all that you have - but then they all added up to make you YOU, so I don't know... You know? *smile* You're pretty wonderful.

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1.) There were no shelters, no (counselors), no divorces, no hassles.

2.) I walked out of the kids(') bedroom and landed

3.) without ever seeing the hand that (put) me there.

4.) The hatred that radiated from them, paralyzed me.
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5.) others out there still, (who) are pushed to their limits and feel there
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6.) because I went into the kids(') rooms, woke them and left our home.

7.) but there are some (who) live in too much fear to seek a new life.

That's it. I'm glad you didn't have it in you to go through with it. Sending hugs. Thanks!









 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Oh my lady, you had your hands full this time and all those are definitely mistakes that I keep repeating. Thank you for the wonderful review and for caring so much. I did not really want to face it but since tomorrow will be a hard day, I thought I may as well just go for it. LOL

reply by robyn corum on 01-Feb-2020
    Hugs?
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I remember your story, Barb. You were very brave and the Lord watched over you and the kids. I thought you had left him but he had left after that. I always cringe every time your write about a husband because I think it's this guy but you have written about fishing and driving with a husband and hope it wasn't him!


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    No I had three, each had their own probems and I seemed to jump from the pan into the fire each time. Thank you so much, the part I left out for another time involved him hiring three friends to kill me so he could get the kids.

reply by lyenochka on 01-Feb-2020
    Horror! What you have been through, dear Barb! You're a walking miracle! So glad God protected you! ♥
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This is excellent, Barb. I know it took courage to write, but it is good for you to get your story out there for yourself and for others who may be suffering in this no-win situation. Women must get out to save themselves and their kids. Even though the law favors the abused in these situations, orders of protection are useless. The woman almost must escape somewhere and start a new life with her kids. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    You are so right, the husbands have rights too and unless the woman is killed, no one listens deep enough to care. Thank you
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country ranch writer
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So many are not so lucky and end up dead to abuse by their husband they didn't have places to run to like they do now. I feel your pain and am so sorry it happened to you and your family.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Did you mean it was a two? Or did you do like I do and it scrolls up when you hit the save? Thank you for taking time and I am so glad you are back.
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I remember when that story really happened. I know things like that kind of abuse happens, but for one who's never experienced it, it's hard to fathom. I can, however, understand someone in the mind set by being beaten down so often. It's a hard thing to get away from. I had a cousin who experienced a similar lifestyle. Thank heavens, you and she managed to get away.


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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    It was hard, and to this day, Tammy and I can not watch the movie without remembering. Thank you so much
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Wow Barb Itotally commend you and your bravely toopenlytell your stories of your life over the years of knowing you and ahuman can only take so much heartache and despair, so much personal fear, so much abuse from another. Your story is both poignant and disturbing andI amsure there are manyothers who haveexperienced domestic abuse but stillsay nothing in fear of reprisal. I really do admire your strength and openness thankyou for sharing your stories,

dip


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    You are so right, the fear is paralyzing more so than anyone can imagine. Reprisals are deadly. Thank you so much for the terrific review. I am glad I printed it now
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Barb, This is a very well written true story you have penned about a really bad situation, but the Lord had His hand on you as you went through this. You used great descriptive words and very interesting imagery. I am so sorry you had to go through that, but so glad you are here with us still! love and blessings, Teri


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Just trying to help people the only way I know. Thank you so much
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