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I Wish I Was a Helium Balloon

Love poem of sorts- finding a way to connect

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Sharon Haiste

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I think this "Love Poem of sorts" is nicely done.
This verse is fun and tells a cute story.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020

Thank you for reading.
It was a love poem to a cute guy. He gets this love language the best

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Hitcher

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That first cup of coffee that helps one start the day... yea! Love my first cup of coffee, got one right now as I read you and yours : )).
A fun little romantic thought you have shared with us. I'm sure he holds you very tight so that you definitely don't float away... nice!

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020

Thank for reading.
This kind of language is what my husband gets. Something playful and fun

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Hi Flyaway!!! Happy New Year! I haven't seen you yet! Is this your first post or just my first message? You know how FS can be with the messages! I liked this poem of yours, it reminded me a little bit of that childs song, "I wish I were..." I don't know if you know that one. (I bet you do though, given what you do!)
What a cute poem and a lovely sentiment! If I did the same I'd have to be a bunch of carpenters tools! LOL

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Hahaha- carpenter tools. Thank you for reading. Your hammer hit the nail on the end.

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Raffaelina Lowcock

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If I were him I would be so thrilled by what you would love to be in order to spend more time with him. This is such and creative and loving gesture you have shown.

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thank you for reading.
I have read it to him / not sure he got that the poem was actually to him.

What I should have said, if I was a golden puppy....

We have and have add two golden retriever

reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020

Yes I would drop everything.
He is a lovely man. We are hitting our 23rd anniversary in May

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Susan X Smith

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This is a cute poem which is almost a story. It is written in a free verse style. The words are engaging and the picture is a great complement. Keep writing.

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

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Thank you for reading. Dropped out for a bit due to family problems. This is the item that I have submitted.

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thank you for reading. Dropped out for a bit due to family problems. This is the item that I have submitted.

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This isn't silly at all. What beautiful cascading metaphors of how love is experienced, concluding with "just hold me tight." It's perfect as is. If this is for a valentine contest, good luck!

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

I did not enter it in any contest. Have not written anything for awhile. I should have, because I like this piece. I was trying to express my love the way a guy might get it. Not necessarily romantic, but more of a commitment of love.

reply by Darlene Franklin on 28-Jan-2020

Okay. Why does she need flowers when I show her my love every day .. .

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2020

Thank you for reading.

He is a lovely man.

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Aaqib Naeem

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Oh this was a fun read and I really liked the idea behind it! :-)
You must be really possessive about your husband to be able to even think that way! All of your examples were unique and somehow made sense as well! Cheers

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thanks for reading.
I actually am not possessive of my husband, but I do love him.
This was actually a write expressing how I wish my relationship was with my husband.

I feel like a Helium balloon floating around.

I wrote about the things my husband likes to do.
I wrote if I was an object- I could be part of his life.

Writing helps me to say the words and make peace with myself.

I like the perspective you gave though. I had not thought of that and I can see why you suggested that. Good insight

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Aww, that's so cute. I especially love the part about being the book. The ending so beautifully sweet, I love it. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this, it's wonderfully written.

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thank you for reading.

I wrote this, because I would like to share in my husbands life.
So if I were the keys, a book, a pair of glasses-I could understand more about his inner world.

The quiet is very loud to me at times.

So if I was a helium balloon - maybe I would feel free to just float in the air.

Writing is the best tool I have for trying to understand myself.

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I Wish I Was a Helium Balloon is a cute and fun-loving little piece. I was drawn to it by the title and surprised by the content as I really was not sure what to expect.

Comment Written 28-Jan-2020

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2020

Thank you for reading.
My ADHD mind always links strange ideas together.
I liked the helium balloon 🎈 idea. The two most important idea is know that I want to know you and do not let me float away.

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