Hello Jay, this is such a beautiful poem. You tell a lovely story in this poem with good rhyme throughout. You describe so well the effect poetry has upon you - very well put. A very moving ending to a lovely poem -
Now, In my last, long years on earth,
touching the sky may soon rebirth......... I enjoyed the read very much. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Nice piece of poetry having impressive wording, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Smooth, spontaneous, and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme.
It's 3rd stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Your poetry is a joy to read, Jaybird, and this one does not disappoint. You're so right in that our poetry allows us to do whatever we want, touch the sky, fly like an eagle, be whatever we want to be. I hope you have many more years writing your poetry so that we can continue to read it. Big hugs, my friend, and have a lovely day. :)) Sandra xxx
I really love this poem! I can see the kid wandering around really trying to touch the sky. I understand about poetry making you feel like you could really touch the sky because I feel the same way. Within my words in my writing sometimes I could go anywhere, anytime! You expressed those feelings perfectly!!
Jay, This is a very well written poem about wanting to touch the sky. You used very good descriptive words. When I was a little girl I always wanted to reach out and touch the clouds too. Thank you for sharing. blessings, Teri
Your poem has a great message. I like how it progresses from birth to death. Your rhymes are good and your lines flow smoothly. I agree with what you say about how writing poetry lifts you up. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan.