Excellent ... your passing this four is the new five with ease I hope I can do the same lol. It is not incumbent nor disenchanting but quite resolute and endearing with a rich cultural and almost noble understanding delivering a good flow and sentiment well rehearsed able to flow well and bring a voice of clarity to this little piece ... It is a delight!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
reply by Bicpen on 08-Feb-2020
anytime ... your usual grade is a five and without dedication your a four Ive been giving a few three to some people to see how it goes I just though giving everyone a five was a bit boring so now im going to review them as they should ...
Okay, Colin... what's all this talk about leaving things behind? What about all of the things you have built with your own hands? All of the buildings you have worked on and put back together? Where would they have been without you? Now, stop all of this talk of mortality... I have enough of that here! You've got another 20 or 30 years to go!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
ha ha that's true but just wanted to do a piece on the Gaelic stones that are here on this Island xx
Monorhyme, couplets and some splendid slanting assonance all pressed into service here. I thought you might have done better than that 'do's in the first line. It is there to force the rhythm and adds nothing to the meaning. Can would have been a a neater solution. Otherwise, good stuff.