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Ahhh, Colin... the things that people used to get up to, eh? The Egyptians with their stone carving were among the most precise there were. There were, of course, the Incas and the Aztecs too... They say you couldn't get a piece of paper between those stones!


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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
    Yes but the Egyptians were first by some 4000 years or so xx
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Interesting writing about how the pyramids may have been built. What exactly did they use to cut the shapes of the stone? Where do you believe they originally got the large stones that were then cut into pieces to form the larger building blocks of the pyramid?
Bill


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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
    Hi Bill , the blocks of stone each weighing over a ton were split in the quarry as they are today , the stone was called tura limestone from memory . Thanks for the review .
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This is really good Colin. The construction of these pyramids took great precision and skill. I can't think of any structure that was more skillfully built. I would love to witness them up close. That desire perhaps may go unfulfilled. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!


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    Cheers Jeffrey, yes they are fantastic and will never be surpassed due to the primitive tools they used , or use of the land etc.. cheers Colin
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Classic I was debating whether to give a six and I think it deserves one though virtually cause i'm all out ... this is good it arouses interest satiates the mind does not rest with its delivery and definitely not lazy it gather good momentum due to the rhyme pushing its voice further and deeper until echoed in the narrative with a sophistication and delight.


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    Many thanks again

reply by Bicpen on 08-Feb-2020
    anytime ...
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It is marvelous that they were able to do such accurate construction even though they had such limited tools. Your poem shows your expertise in building, Colin!

"said the pharaohs man," (Pharaoh's)


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    Mantmy thanks Helen
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I've been to Egypt three times and travelled the whole length of the Nile. All the tombs and buildings were amazing, and no one can really give a true answer as to how some of them were built when they tell you without hesitation that some had to align up with the heavens and you would have to look down on them to see if they were perfect. You're poem gives us some insight into how some were built. It's a wonderful poem, Colin, you've written some excellent lines that do explain some. Well done! Sandra xx


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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
    Hi Sandra , thank you and I have not been and what I did not add to the poem was how they were unbelievable stargazers and mapped the whole thing because they could then tell when the Nile will flood. Cheers Colin xx

reply by sandramitchell on 06-Feb-2020
    Yes they were. Most of what they did was to worship one star or another. They were amazing people, and still I can't get a good answer as to why the Egyptians and the Romans suddenly went from megga intelligent to being little more than peasants.

reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
    Hi Sandra , the Egyptians used deities in their every day life and its civilisation lasted for over 3000 years only surpassed by the Chinese, the Roman's worshiped mother at the time of Cleopatra and following this the Roman's conquered upper egypt but could not complete this against upper Egypt , Memphis Giza everything ransacked and the people lost touch with the old kingdom. Rome after a thousand years of conquering and enslaving peoples coukd not sustain the Germanic tribes etc. They took on too much basically. It will take a lot to match the success of egypt who invented the sundial toothpaste make up and much more ,
    Cheers colin xx

reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
    That should be Mythra instead of mother Sandra

reply by sandramitchell on 06-Feb-2020
    LOL, I'm sure Mother would have been pleased. I guessed what you meant to write, :))
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Fourth line from the bottom, did you mean 'with'?

Loved the idea and I think you have something there. LOL Nicely done in thought and construction.


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    Thank you barb changed that cheers xx
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It is amazing and has astounded us all over time, how such structures were built back then! And of course you should know! I would love to see them for real, these pyramids. A fine poem in tribute to the genius of man, love Dolly x


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    Many thanks Dolly xx
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