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Scene at an Animal Shelter 2

A one-scene script with Pons and Ned

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Oh, Bill, you do make me laugh out loud, so you do. I know I'm repeating myself, and it's not for lack of saying something else. I just don't know where you get it from. It's hilarious. I love Pons and Ned. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks, Ulla. You?re very kind
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Bill, I especially liked that you opened the scene with a fecal smell. That's the way I'll always remember animal shelters. I understand more up-to-date shelters have eliminated that. I haven't been to a shelter in more than thirty years. The dialog appears natural and not forced. You have, in a few words, described the scene, the characters and the conclusion so that all readers should understand and comprehend what your vision is. Well done.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thank you, Henry

reply by Henry King on 17-Feb-2020
    You are welcome Bill.
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DED is too funny... a pep talk to the Lemmings... hahaha! I'm glad that he broke the euthanizer 2000 though... what a move! Hahahaha! Another fun read :)


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thank you, Susan
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This is a well-written, interesting script. your dialogue seems natural and your characters come to life. Poor Ned doesn't have a clue. Glad he has people willing to explain things to him.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks, MD, god giving this a look.
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Leave it to Ned to go for the unexpected, the unusual and most likely the most unwanted. Which, in my book, makes Ned a hero. The world needs more people like Ned.


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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks, nomi
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Good for Ned! He's got the animals a stay of execution. So there is some good on D-Red! Now, what is a one-eyes dog with a hairy horn?? I'm going to have to wait to find out. I'm glad our boys are back! :)) Sandra xxx


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    The one-eyed dog with the hairy horn is one turned away from you, so all you see is it?s tail and anus. For Pons it was a joke description, but Ned took it literally.

reply by sandramitchell on 16-Feb-2020
    Oh, LOL, it looks like I'm becoming more like Ned! lol!!!
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It has some humor in it, but mostly it's so sad and really succeeds in calling attention to the plight of these poor shelter animals. I guess you put the humor in, to offset the brutality of all that "euthanasia." Interesting that Ned, who seems like such a ding bat, is the one who has the most compassion for the animals, especially for the one-eyed pup. I like that; turns stereotypes upside down. This would make a great skit (to be performed with other acts, I suppose) for an animal rights or no-kill shelter fundraiser, or a pet adoption/publicity event.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks, Mary Kay. That?s a nice idea to put this out to aid animal rights groups. Of course, in that caseI?d probably have to eliminate D-Red?s sarcastic tone.

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 16-Feb-2020
    You're welcome, Bill. If D-Red is kind of a "bad guy," folks just might love to hate him! He's a character and not a real person. But you would have to be ok with it. And if it was really going to be performed before an audience, you'd have to make sure the language was all clean and probably PC as well (making sure not to offend any nationalities). In real life nothing is very simple, I guess! But if you wrote something specifically for an audience of animal activists, you'd be starting off on the right foot. Food for thought.

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks again, Mary Kay
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Hurray for Ned. He bought some time for the poor animals about to be euthanized. Hopefully, they will find homes before the time comes again. I'm eager to see what he picks for his pet.


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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks, Yvonne.
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I guess Ned will get a unicorn-dog mix puppy? I think I need a picture, Bill.
So can only Ned see Ded and Red? Good that Ned asked Red for a delay on the euthanizing.

"smell of fecies" (feces)


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Yes. DED and D-RED only appear to Ned and he forgets them right after.
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Ned is up to his usual, and very amusing. Pons is so erudite he probably knows how to spell German shepherd. (I just watched the Westminster Kennel Club Dog Show.) I'm glad the euthanizer is out of commission for a while. It's good that Ned's thinking about all the pets that deserve a shot at finding a home. Just my personal opinion, but I would lead D-Red out of this. He totally changes the tone. judi


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    I should get Pons to write this stuff. He does spell better. He would likely skip D-Red as well. If only he were real.
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