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Where has all the water gone


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Its clever with a good conclusion and outcome of questioning the idea is strong and the concepts pure but the hard work needs to be done to enrich and evaluate more smoothly the use of its expression it need fine tuning and a tweak with the language to lift into the realms of excellency.


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    Cheers , yet I am happy with it. Cheers Colin

reply by Bicpen on 10-Feb-2020
    excellent ... well thats what counts at the end of the day what we're happy with and so long as it delights us who cares other than a six star lol.
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A fun poem and reflection about the changes of the tides and the pull of the moon. I wonder who is talking just one person to another? Or maybe some seagulls?
Beautiful picture!


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    Hi Helen, I am talking to the reader lol. cheers X
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Hey there, Colin! What you need there is a gill net! Then the tide will do your fishing for you :) Sounds like a charmer to me! I loved the lesson in the poem, a fun one here. :)


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    ha ha thanks Susan xx
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Very interesting poem about Low and High Tide. I often wonder when it is Low Tide does it leave fish on the sand that will eventually die because of lack of water? The art together with the poem is a good presentation.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Hi Raf, they get pulled with the current and no harm comes to them, many thanks xx

reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 09-Feb-2020

    good. Thanks for that.
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A very well done descripton of high and low tide done in excellent AABB rhyme. Read very well and it told the differences and when to expect. What did you mean by 15 minutes?


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Hi Barb the next day the tides are different by 15 mins as the distance from the sun is different. thanks xx

reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 09-Feb-2020
    Thank you
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I love the tone of this poem and the rhymes, they are great. I love how you manage to tell us a story through your poem. I really enjoyed reading this. It's quite an interesting topic and the tone is really fun.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Many thanks May, we have a storm here at present and always disappointing when the tides out. Cheers Colin xx
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A poetic explanation of how the tides work. This is in the tradition of didactic poems that are there to teach different trades the essentials of their jobs. There is an old sea shanty, for example, that lists all the principal lights seen on a trip up the English Channel. Of course it is a lot easier to remember if the lesson is in verse.

'remember when your puzzled, the other feels the same.'

This 'your' is not thwe possessive one but a contraction of 'you are' so needs the apostrophe to show that the 'a' is missing and the 'e' one the end is retained so it is written 'you're'.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Cheers Jim, I will read and read your comment at the bottom until I understand it lol. Many thanks Colin. opps understand after readingtwice cheers again.
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