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I love the rhythm and rhymes of this poem, they are so fun to read. Also, I think your choice of topic is quite unique. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem.


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
    Many thanks May, I really hope you like the next one, as it won't be everyone's cup of tea. Bet wishes Colin XXX
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Excellent ...

It is a good idea and the concepts are used well with good use of the rhyme though might be needing a tweak to give a smoother flow maybe just me ... It is a great dedication and serves a purpose with well defined grounding and a genuine sentiment to enthral the narrative.


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    Many thanks again, cheers Colin

reply by Bicpen on 10-Feb-2020
    Anytime ... it was good and worth the five so there you go that did not hurt to much ... lol.

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    HJi, thanks no I really apprieciate your in death reviews even the four stars and wish i had the bottle to give more of them.. but they don't like it up e,m as we say.. amazing how a thought out poem of more than five stanzas can get equal stars to a 1,2,3 liner that does not rhyme, the four stars you give me I can at least see where your coming from.. lol to many people do not wish to upset,including me sometimes especially women lol..
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Very nice tribute to your friend! I'm glad you saved some of his drawings. It explains how you got into art also as these precise drawings are critical to your work.

"we drew and drew as the building did sore." (soar)
"use the center line, flip the templets, don't be daft" (templates)


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    Many thanks Helen.
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Hi Colin, You know, people don't use that word enough I don't think, "daft"... I think it's an underused word. I hate the sound of 'stupid' and 'dumb'... 'idiot' isn't a lot better. But 'daft' seems softer somehow. Gentler maybe. Yup, gotta love that last line. ;)


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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
    cheers Susan xx ha ha
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To be part of restoration at Westminster Abbey would be the icing on the cake for any career, and it seems with a bit of a legend. You still have his succinct drawings. Your poem lights a candle of knowledge about your talents.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Hi Raffaelina, thank you for this review. Cheers xx
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Yes indeed, everything starts with a drawing really. this is a great and fitting tribute to your teacher. cI have been thinking about some of mine, the good ones anyway. They were worth their weight in gold.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Thank you Jim, this means a lot to me to express it in this way. Cheers
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How very cool to look back over work and have the memories wash over us like this!! ;) A wonderful offering for the day, Colin, but most especially I like your final line there... pretty good advice to no 'be daft', yeah? :) I would only suggest, perhaps, a bit of attention to the 'syllable length' of each line as you read it out loud... there are few places where too many words trip up your reader... :) :) I'm not a strict syllable counter all the time, but too big of difference between the lines completely loses your rhythm and the enjoyment of your 'story'... ;):) Please feel free to ignore... :) :) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette

with the many, the brothers from our past,
we restored this building so that it will last.

He was offered a better job down Whitehall way
before he could leave one question, I say,
How do you do this? For my next job I ask,
"use the center, flip the templets, don't be daft"


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
    Hi Yvette, understand no problem. Cheers Colin xx
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