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15 syllable poem.

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Fine presentation here, Santha. I have been away and missed much of your writing. I apologize but I am back now and I liked this contest entry of yours I wish you good luck. It is well written and makes plenty of sense. :) Bob

Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you Bob, this is my first post after almost two months .back to back death and misfortunes in the family has drained any creativity I had (if I had!).I just decided to shake off the inertia ..

reply by Mastery on 12-Feb-2020

Good for you Santha. :) Bob

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Traveling the back roads can be daunting and no traffic to keep your attention can make one very exhausted through and through.

Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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Thank you very much

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A very well-written fifteen syllable poem about the long and lonely road that lumbers on and make us tired and weary but we need to go on to reach our final destination.

Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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Thank you very much.

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Boy that is the truth - we get so weary - the same pains, the same struggles, all the life long. But when I think this way, I look at folks who lived long, fulfilled lives and who rejoiced in every day. I wish to be like that.
Good poem for this challenge.

Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much.

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Great illustration to go with your 15 syllable poem entry. Your poem reflects a long winding road. Hopefully, you are driving, not walking.
It was a good read.
Thanks for sharing.

Comment Written 10-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much.

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Y. M. Roger

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A longing is sensed in this offering... a lengthy journey not yet complete. It is a well-written offering to draw such a longing in but 15 syllables - well done! ;) I would, perhaps, suggest some form of punctuation to link the two parts. An ellipsis?

to lumber on
I'm weary -->

to lumber on...
I'm weary

Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)

Comment Written 10-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much for the suggestion.I have incorporated your suggestion.

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The message is loud and clear, but I detect, by counting on my fingers, that your poem has only fourteen syllables. Changing I'm to I am in the last line would do the trick. Good luck in the contest.

Comment Written 10-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much .I have rectified the syllable count.

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This is a very nice and well presented 15 syllable poem you have penned for the contest. I read and reread a few times. I keep getting 14 syllables. If you changed that last line to read to I am weary instead of I'm weary it would be 15. If I am wrong please forgive me. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

Comment Written 10-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much.You are right .I did rectify that.

reply by Teri7 on 12-Feb-2020

you are so welcome. Blessings, Teri

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We all get weary on this crazy journey. What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the picture.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

Comment Written 10-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much

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Aaqib Naeem

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It is a beautiful poetry and I really loved your writing. You're possessed with amazing talent and I hope you'll win this contest. Wishing you luck. God bless!!

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Comment Written 10-Feb-2020

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thank you very much .Thanks for the wishes.

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