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I lost Agustin


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RShipp
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"Several times he forgets to wait for Veronica to get back into the car, stepping on the gas peddal before she had shut the door, nearly running her over." I know I shouldn't have laughed, but that is funny.

Enjoyed... as usual.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    Don't feel bad, Veronica and I laughed too. Now that she is the designated driver her live is no longer in danger.
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You are able to accomplish much as a blind person. I like the bold print since it is easy to see and read. Agustin and Veronica appear to be nice people, helpful, and concerned about you. Well, done!


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks for the compliment.

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 06-Mar-2020
    You're welcome.

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    You are welcome.
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Trying to make sense of this story, so sorry -Augustin and Veronica are two Mexicans thy helps you with your daily activities and now Augustin is gone, ?Deported?


 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks for catching the spags. I keep correcting them but for some reason they don't show up. No, he just went shopping and took a bus home.
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Good to see you writing again. Please check out these:
The font door
front
this occures,
occurs
on the gas peddal before she had
pedal
Mexican parents, would I have had small fee.
feet
years and devorsed a few
divorced
This is very interesting. I am glad you had a good time my friend. Hope you are doing better! love and prayers, Teri


 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks. I appreciate your kind comments.
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Very very rich in content this warm contest offering is. I couldn't help but read again and again. Just like you had pointed out, you may want to watch the punctuation in the write-up and immediately follow up with an upper case of an alphabet after a full stop. A typical case in point is: The font door is difficult to open. so... The S should be upper case, and font should be replaced with front. "I sit in the front seet because it is the most comfortable and easiest for me to get in and out of." The seet should be replaced with seat.

There are still quite a number of other spelling errors which are though minor, but if corrected, will make your write-up stand out. Apart from punctuation and spelling errors, your offering for the contest is super! Best of luck in this regard.


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
    Thanks for pointing out the spags. I made the changes but I don't know why they don't show when you read this.
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Once again, thank you for sharing your ramble with us. I always enjoy reading and want to know how you're doing.

When I go anywhere with Agustin and Veronica there are specific rules to be folowed when riding in the car .(followed and no space between car and the period.)

The font door is difficult to open. so I must wait for someone to open for me. (front)

I sit in the front seet because it is the most comfortable and easiest for me to get in and out of. (seat)

The same occurrs when we get back into the car. I am not allowed to touch the door handle and must wait for Veronica to open the door. While this occures, (occurs)

Lee and Annie were married in the US for twenty years and devorsed a few years ago. (divorce)

Whenever we go anywhere we alwasy stop along the was pick up thing we may need. (always)


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thanks for catching the spags. I am living proof that being blind is a major hindrance.
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This was such an entertaining read. I would love to be an invisbible passenger on your car-rides. lol

A few points, all of them minor:

there are specific rules to be folowed - spelling - followed

when riding in the car . - delete extra space after 'car'

The font door is difficult to open. so I must wait for someone to open for me. - spelling - front. Delete period. Should be 'open it for me'

I sit in the front seet - spelling - seat

When it comes time to get out of the car, they insisted - should be 'they insist'

Unfortunately as kind as Agustin is, he likes me - comma needed after 'Unfortunately'

The same occurrs - spelling - occurs

While this occures, - spelling - occurs

stepping on the gas peddal - spelling - pedal

I began insisting Agusting - spelling - Agustin

speak to Augustin to translate a street signs and other questions - delete 'a'

Today I asked him if I had been born in Mexico to Mexican parents - comma after 'him'

would I have had small fee. - should be 'feet'

He told me that if I want to invite his ex-wife, Annie - delete extra space after 'his'

let him know and he won't come - delete extra space after 'and'

devorsed a few years ago. - spelling - divorced

They don't fight but it is awkward for them to be together - delete extra space after 'to'

She lives here about six month a year - should be 'six months'

Whenever we go anywhere we alwasy - spelling - always

stop along the was pick up thing - should be 'stop along the way to pick up things'

Her laughter contined for several minute - should be 'minutes'

Augustin disapeared into thin air - spelling - disappeared

I could not find the remote to turn of - should be 'turn off'

you should know how cold it get here - should be 'how cold it gets here'

Best wishes
Judy


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
    Thanks for catching the all to many spags. That is the downside to being blind.
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I enjoyed your ramble, Sasha. I'm happy for you that you have Veronica and Augustin. The three of you seem to have a great time together no matter where you go. I hope your health and eyesight is improving. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
    Thanks, I am thrilled you enjoyed this one. I am so fortunate to have them as friends.
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This is an interesting little adventure. Thank goodness you relieved Agustin of his driving duties. I hope that he wasn't trying to purposely hit Veronica. I've said it before, I'll say it again, you have great friends. Thanks for sharing this well written rant. Well done!


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
    Veronica is relieved too. I am so fortunate to have such great friends.
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Oh hun, your humor is the light of my day. I love your stories and this one had me laughing before I got through. Don't change it for anything, this is the cream of the crop


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
    Thank you so much. He finally turned up. He had a little personal shopping to do and took a bus home later.

reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
    Thank you very much.
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