Oh, my dear lad... are you going to hear it about faith having no standing in fact! (I'm afraid it does as there are lots of historic archaeological sites that have been linked to happenings recorded in the Bible.) As to this poem, it's wonderful. A historical piece about your ancestors and what they were like, following their beliefs, waging war on their beliefs. That's what they did in those days. We can't, and shouldn't forget that, any more than we should forget things like the Inquisition or the Holocaust.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
Hi Susan lovely Susan thanks for the review and the stars , faith has no fact its s belief a feeling not backed up by any archeological site that then could prove a God was real. All man made I am afraid . So faith is a word to counteract fact as a way of justification , if faith were any different then I would have some , like these words and the words in the bible which are man made xxxx and the kisses lol
It is a sermon in and of itself speaking of the lost paradise which is disguised as the liberty of the human soul and in all the philosophy of man it is the striking example that liberty is what he seeks. This poem is free and has a delicate touch in its rhyme and narrative it delivers with sound conviction and forthright view without any prejudice though it will not speak for everyone it will speak to some such is the nature of poetry. I feel it deserves the five Colin though I have awarded some of your work a six but hey ho if its your best poem who am I to argue.
It's nice that you are so patriotic. Also, I love the image the first part creates in my mind. I can understand your point of view and it's interesting for me to read your perspective since you are British. Reading the last part I can understand why this poem is not for everyone. :) Honestly, I think I am more in the middle than this but I still enjoyed this beautifully written poem and find the perspective refreshing.
I thought your poem was very well written. More than any thing else about you poem, I respect your beliefs. If there is an afterlife I hope that it is every bit as beautifull as my church would have me believe. If it is not, what have I lost? If it is, what have you?
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
many thanks... Time is what would be lost.. cheers
Yes, I know we agree to disagree about faith. But I would say that humans without belief in God would still justify their actions with whatever is the popular mindset of their times. I'm sure Attila the Hun and ancient kings of Cush and Egypt justified with their gods whatever conquering they pursued.