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Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "St. Louis Chapter 22 part 2"

Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?

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NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Those two are killin' me. *grin*


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
    I am sorry you had to read this when there was no money attached, but I appreciate the support.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 26-Feb-2020
    No worries,Barbara-- I'm 'hit and miss' on site a lot lately, and this was not a proper review, although I did read it properly. I just had to get the rating recorded before midnight or lose the last six (and this deserves that rating).
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Hello, Barbara,

I like how you start the story and set up the scene. It's almost as if I was a fly on the wall and could see everything. The story and characters are well developed. Good job

Gypsy


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the encouragement.
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Hello Barbara, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for another enjoyable and well-written chapter. I love the dynamic between Logan and Mac, they are two of my favorite FanStory characters. Good job and have a good day!


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the wonderful encouragement.
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Hi, Barbara

The plot thickens as they say :) I like the intricacy of your plotting in this chapter. McKenzie is revealing her sleuthing skills and, in the process, moving the story forward quite nicely.

Well done!

Bev


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Hey, friend,

Great chapter. I like the way these two work and think off of each other. And this new theory sounds like it could work. But anyone that devious will certainly be hard to trap and wicked to deal with.

Which means lots more in store. Nice!

Great job!


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    Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Good chapter. Good dialogue on who the possible suspects are. You really didn't give anything away; Except Parks is a snake and I pity anyone being in his sphere of influence.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Now that Mac has figured everything out, but can't prove anything at the moment, I'm expecting the upcoming chapters to be intense. You did an excellent job, as always. Shirley


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
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I like those two together. This might only be day 9, but things are certainly sparking between them. Now, I think Mac is onto something here, it does really fit in nicely, doesn't it? It would also relieve Logan that is sister wasn't a drug addict or a dealer. Let's hope they follow this idea and come up with something. Well done, Barbara, another nice chapter in this book. Oh, congrats on publishing your book!! :)) Sandra xxx


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the kind review and the good thoughts on my new published book. Hopefully it sells well.

reply by sandramitchell on 17-Feb-2020
    I'm hoping so too. I'll be looking it up. xx
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Uh! Whatever! I love it... I'm going to bed! LOL It's so funny to think of this entire story only having gone on for a few days. Just over a week still? These two are having quite the banter. Fun writing Barbara... I wish it didn't end so fast! :)


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the kind review. I enjoy writing the banter.
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There are some intriguing scenarios being put forward in this chapter which give you the scope to go off in new directions. The easy relationship between Lagan and Mac continues to develop. Looking forward to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020



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    Thank you for the kind review.
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