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Poetic Vows
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versing together happily ever after
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| Aaaaah, so that would explain the need for 'time out alone' that I need once in a while and the attitude I get from them (yes, we have a menage or more over here - scandalous, I know, but so juicy when it comes to the wedding gossip, don't you think?!) when I'm looking for one mood and they just keeping come up with everything but! :) :) LOL! Absolutely adore your take on this one, Ronni -- especially the bubbly spirits... although there is one of them gets a bit risque when I imbibe sometimes so we have to keep an eye on him... ;) :) Thanx so much, my lady -- ours is a rocky marriage over here! :) Yvette
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2020 |
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
Hello dear Yvette,
You aced this so perfectly dear, and your own thoughts and
reflections are spot on too! So pleased you enjoyed, this was
an experiment my muse kind of took on its own...and who in
their right mind dare quarrel with their muse, right?
Love, Ronni
Sorry for such long overdue reply: Delay due to a required trip
to CA. my one and only sister, needing to have a 2nd critical heart
surgery. Outcome good, prognosis promising, on course with
extended rehab. So glad ordeal is finally over, a bit jet lad weary,
but so glad to be back home! And finding another ladder...LOL...
Take care dear, keep smiling and everybody guessing what gem
you will come up with next...:) ;)
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"Poetic Vows"
"As if a wedding of Eternal Bliss?"
"Two pens marriage sealed with an ink of Kiss?"
"Amen written all over each and every guests face!"
"White paper all to honor with Grace?"
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis;
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
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"Many years ago probably close to ten."
"At a Latter-Day Saint Church of Jesus Christ."
"Mary Bell Road in Manahawkin, New Jersey bordering Barnegat."
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"East Brunswick Stake President."
(President Stokes)
"Attended his once a week viewing of our wonderful little facility."
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"And, As he was having his talk about current Latter-Day Saint churches of Jesus Christ, throughout the world."
"I wrote...
"Stoke the Fire"
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"After we were done taking in the sacrament and right before our current President Penrod."
"Would be teaching Sunday school."
I handed it to him and I watched...
"And, watched done more...
"Until he started to read...
"And, share it with President Richard Erring the Sunday School President in East Brunswick Stake Church...
"And, After a 45-minute discussion by my friend Cary Penrod"
"He came over to me and said to me...
"You are my muse."
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"That would not be the first time I would entertain this man."
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"Throughout the specter of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-Day Saints, I became well recognized as their poet of Laureate for my religious poetry."
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"A Missionary President."
(Female and Spanish)
"From Pleasantville, New Jersey asked me if I would be so willing to entertain the following Sunday in the month of February."
"I said no for I dad a full plate of grief I was dealing with."
(The loss of my only son Jason and then followed eight months later with my only wife Carolyn)
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"How many years would pass!"
"And, again but now feeling much better."
"She asked if I would like to be part of the very first Latter-Day Saint Church of Jesus Christ talent competition in East Brunswick New Jersey."
"And, of course where my muse buddy and my friend, President Stokes teaches."
"And, I replied I would be so honored."
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"Since it was going to be for the month of February, I decided to write a beautiful poem called "Valentine Hearts."
Note: "This was before I was asked to compete!"
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"The day of the Competition finally came and I was very excited and ready to roll as President Stokes came up to me and asked me if I was prepared?"
And, I replied.
'I will go first if you like?'
He then said...
'There's only two professionals here.'
'Yourself brother Smrkovsky and the Guggenheim from Philadelphia to entertain."
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Note: "This major event,
two years in the making, a talent competition, of clustered...
"That meant it was seven churches in South Jersey."
"Along with all,
"The Latter-Day Saint Churches with Priests and family attending this event.'
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Note: "Not just here in South Jersey, nor in North Jersey."
"Not even in every State in the United States!"
"But in each and every country."
"In the entire World where the Latter-day Saint Church of Jesus Christ exists!"
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With that said...
"And, five events later."
"It was time for the Guggenheim to entertain."
"But the man and his female well-dressed assistant was not ready?"
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"Again, President Stokes came up to me and this time he said...
'Brother Smrkovsky.'
'The Guggenheim is not ready to go sixth.'
'Can you go now instead of seventh?'
"And, I said to him...
(As I did before)
'Yes, and you will get only Excellent and Exceptional."
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"Dressed in a white starter shirt with a pink tie wrapped around my neck."
Black dress trousers and shoes."
"And, on open Mic."
"I went up and presented to over 200 people." Valentine Hearts."
Note: "We were allowed five minutes."
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"Valentine Hearts"
Written on February 7th, 2011.
By Doctor and Brother Smrkovsky
Copyright©Fanstory 2011
'All Rights Reserved'
'Mickey had his Minnie of mouse.'
'True love created from a genius now living far, far, above.'
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'Popeye had his Olive of Oil, while his best friend
Whimpy's love?'
'Was for his burgers.'
'Fried and never boiled!'
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'Samson had his Mighty curled and black locks cut!'
'And, as a result?'
'He was tortured and beaten.'
'Chained to the pillars of Rome!'
'And, turned into nothing more or less than but a pariah.'
'A all the because of his love of a beautiful woman named Delilah.'
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' While, Marilyn Monroe sailed down a "River of No Return."
(A 1954 movie)
'Married the playwright by the name of Miller.'
'Divorced him and then remarried the CEO slugger.'
'Joe DiMaggio who did not know that JFK was in the way!'
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Nore: "After I said that
a No-No!"
"For in our churches?"
"We give testimonies each and every first Sunday of the month!"
"And, some may cry!'
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"And, the Guggenheim's female assistant."
"Stood up and clapped!"
(The only person in the entire church!)
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"So, at that point."
"I looked over at her and realized that she doesn't realize or even know what she just did was do wrong!"
"And, yes we give crying testimonies one Sunday on the first of each month!"
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"So I ripped it up and finished it of course with these amazing words!"
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'Throughout history, there's been so many Hearts broken and so many Hearts hurting.'
'Elizabeth Taylor many times.'
'Had her Richard of Burton but if true love actually exists?:
'And, you truly, truly do believe?'
'Well then of course it goes all the way back to Adam and Eve!"
The End.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2020 |
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| I relished your title and your vows--so creative and original! I could visualize the "manuscript cake" and all the other splurges. Big, "joyous toasts"- Joan
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2020 |
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
Hello Joan
Thank you for the great visualizing appreciations and compliments.
This was an experiment my muse kind of took over on its own...
claiming 'first rights' as it often does...LOL... Glad you enjoyed,
and thanks too for the generous extra star. Hugs, Ronni
Sorry for such belated reply: Delay due to a needed trip to Ca.,
my one and only sister I have, needed 2nd critical heart surgery.
Outcome good, prognosis optimistic, with extended rehab.
Relieved her crisis is over, am bit jet lag weary, but ever so
glad to be back home again. There really is no better place
than home! Hope all well your way, and are staying safe too.
Especially with this new dangerous virus; be careful.
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reply by Joan E. on 16-Mar-2020
I am glad you are back home safe and sound and your sister's prognosis is good. Thank you for your good wishes and for sharing your delightful experiment. More cheers- Joan
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Yes, this is adorable and fun. I am still on my honeymoon as my muse won't leave me alone. Wakes me up all night!! A sweet and unique one, Ronni dear, all dressed in pink! Romancing the muse!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2020 |
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
Hi dear Sally,
Seems like your muse and mine are pretty similar in keeping us
burning the midnight oil and beyond LOL so glad you enjoyed,
this one my muse kind of took off with it on its own....assuming
"first rights" regardless of anything else shy of that...LOL..
Love, Ronni
Sorry for the way overdue reply dear: Delay due to needed trip
to CA., my one and only sister needing a 2nd critical heart surgery.
Outcome good. Prognosis optimistic with extended rehab.
So glad finally over, bit jet lag weary, but so GLAD to be back
home too! Hope you and yours are doing great!
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| Of course I have no cause to believe in a muse, but I guess one can call whatever stirs one to write, any name they wish. And mine has become very strong as I've progressed, it also opened my mind exponentially to the imagination's unlimited potential, and everything is bound only by one's faith. Then having two dimensions to work in, doubles the possibilities, I left school when I was 14, bound by my working class parents thinking, But God had other ideas. Well done Ronni. Blessings Roy
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2020 |
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
Hi Roy,
Thanks for your most interesting and thoughtful comments and
reflections. My oh my, you indeed do have quite a set of self
acquitted assets and talents, and surely have pleased God with
every one of them! Your tenacity and dedication most awesome
and truly rewarding to you, and passed on to us in your totally
outstanding writings of such depth and deep consequence.
Gratefully always, Ronni
Sorry for such a belated reply: Delay to a needed trip to CA.
my one and only sister needing a 2ns critical heart surgery.
Outcome good, prognosis optimistic with extended rehab.
So glad her crisis is over, bit jet lag weary, but oh so glad to
be back home again too! Stay well friend! God bless!
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reply by royowen on 16-Mar-2020
I?m so glad your sister?s prognosis is good. My two girls are incredibly close, so I know how it works, bless you for sharing, Roy
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