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Joan E.
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What an intriguing, parallel artwork you selected! After reading your 5-7-5 poem, I could see the "Muscular ripplings" and "Feel the Burn!" Your use of alliteration added to the intensity of your message. Cheers- Joan


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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Joan.
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Ugh! I may never eat a slice of meat again. I won't even bother trying to guess what benighted beast this might be. It does not even matter. It is horrible to look at and even more gruesome to consider how it came to look like this. Excuse me while I hurl.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    This is art, nomi.

reply by nomi338 on 06-Mar-2020
    So you say. Urp!
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Well you have my stars for the pure imagery your words describe, GYM work rips the muscles and hopefully when they repair they are a bit bigger, along with surgery to improve ones looks this is to me the worst kind of mutilation of our bodies, one can be fit without destroying what is natural, ****kahpot


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thank you, kahpot
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I'm not too impressed with the overly developed muscular types. As you describe, "a flayed pile of meat." Great description. They may be proud of their bodies, but they might give a little attention to other things, as well. Muscles take over, even the brains. Very impressive wording. judi


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



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    Thank you, Judi

reply by judiverse on 07-Mar-2020
    You're welcome. judi
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LOL!! Kinda feels like that sometimes after a workout, doesn't it?! ;) Love the mixing of the 'new fangled' words in this one, Bill -- thanx for sharing! ;) :) Yvetet


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



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    Thanks, Yvette, for giving this a look. Bill
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Hi Bill, that was certainly a different take on what exercise do to your body. I think the picture more and less said it all. I liked your 5-7-5 poem. All the best. Ulla:))


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    Thanks, Ulla.
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Hmm. This is a hard one. So this must be an ekphrastic poem and this is your humorous interpretation of the picture. We went from the gym to the butcher shop in just three lines.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    ...and here we are.

reply by lyenochka on 06-Mar-2020
    Hmm, you're trying to make me vegetarian - I can feel it.
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This sounds rather disgusting to a vegetarian! But meat eaters should see the raw state of meat and the decide whether to eat it or not! Glad I'm not about to have my tea, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020



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    Thanks, Dolly. Enjoy a nice LT sandwich. : )
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Bill, This is a very interesting 5-7-5 poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. Your words went well with the picture. Blessings, Teri


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    Thanks, Teri
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