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Sometimes the virus is allready Inside

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I love this line: giving us a sliver of hope that someday we'd be able to plunge into the sapphire sky. It also made me think of birds in cages thinking aloud. This is the kind of short short that overlaps science fiction and reality. Nice post.


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thanks Crystie!
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Excellent entry, Stan--and so timely.
Just how long can we expect people to coop themselves up?
I suppose that depends on the death toll.
For me, it's easy. I'm a hermit even amid the most sociable of times.
Best of luck, Stan.

Peace, Lee


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    I was thinking the same thing. I could give Bigfoot a run for his money when it comes to social distancing. Since I've lost half my business, I have plenty of time to write.

reply by humpwhistle on 23-Mar-2020
    Sorry about your business, Stan. But glad you have more time to write.
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This story is so hard hitting. It really scared me but that's not a bad thing. An excellent fash fiction. Good luck in the competition. Stay safe. Jen.


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks so much. I find myself saying "Stay safe," too. But it reminds me of the movie, "The Purge."
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It is a scary thing and no telling how long it will last. Your contest entry is in good form. I enjoyed reading although it was eerie. I believe there are some who act like this man did and may end up regretting their ways. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    I agree! Thanks so much. Stay safe.
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This is interesting. The government has the whole world on lockdown and living in fear. I'm not one of those because I've been near death many times and my God has rescued me every time. I hope they find a vaccine soon. My hope and faith isn't in that though. My hope is in the Lord. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks Jeff. Everything in the world is changing around us, but Jesus is the author and finisher of my faith. Blessings around the bend!
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Hello Stan. This is a very well conceived and written Flash. Your narrative is interesting and you use strong words and phrases to tell the story. The capper is the surprise ending of the story that did catch me by surprise. Exceptional flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.

Robert


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks again Robert. Everything in our world, politics, etc. is changing. My faith is the one constant. Stay low and hunker down.

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 23-Mar-2020
    We have special "Senior Hours" at a supermarket on Tuesday at 06:00 for one hour. That's my only outing for the week. One hour to get supplies. Robert

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    What state are you in Robert? We are in upstate NY, Syracuse area.

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 23-Mar-2020
    I'm in Western NC.
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What a very well-written chapter, very relatable. I'm sure we will all feel that way before it's over. We don't have a stay at home order yet but are strongly suggesting for everyone who can stay at home do. I had to go to the store yesterday, the trip made me feel like a germaphobe between social distancing, and sanitizing my hands every few feet. The items I chose were taken from the back. Ok, so I might've overdone it a bit. Great story. Good luck with your contest.


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks again Misty. Hunker down until this passes through.
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Great flash fiction writing! That virus at least gives us something to write about and think on. People do come to the point of chucking everything o the wind to get a bit f reprieve.


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks so much. Cabin fever.

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 23-Mar-2020
    You've got cabin fever? Think of all the things you ever wanted to do at home, but never had time to do.
    Find online studies to delve into.
    Hone cooking skills. Men are the greatest cooks.
    Make sourdough starter.
    Bake bread.
    Bake Parker House rolls.
    Watch videos on a skill you want to give the good old college try to.
    The best tailors in the world are men...
    Want more ideas? ha ha

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Reading and writing. I might be able to finish my latest novel in a matter of weeks!
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I hope it never gets to that point in this world. There's just too many unanswered questions, and not enough supplies. I didn't see a thing wrong with your FF. Great job. Shirley


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks Shirley. I hope it doesn't get that bad. Talk is still about a nationwide lockdown.
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Gosh, I hope you flash fiction doesn't come to pass. I'm sure you making fun of all the hype over this virus. I'm glad we can still laugh. Seriously, I wonder how long can we endure. I'm afraid a lot of people will go crazy and do something foolish if it goes on too long. Nicely written.
Beth

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 Comment Written 22-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Thanks Beth. I hope and pray it won't become what I wrote!
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