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Tourist Mountain Rescue


Tourists rescued in a snowstorm.

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Got to love those rugged rescue men and women. They are willing to risk so much to help others and you do an excellent job of showing that in your story of one of those courageous men. I enjoyed the story of how he got his name. I wonder if the Asian couple really will name their child Twenty.
Best of luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
    Hello new friend. Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Blessings, K.
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A good story about 'Twenty' and his other mountain rescue group. Enjoyed the little tale of how he got his nickname. I take it Twenty's not a fan of the pie and pea floater, one of my mob. Enjoyed your story Aussie,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Hello Valda, Thanks for reading; he hated pies after the pie-eating contest, digesting 'Twenty' pies is how he got his nickname. Love, Kay.
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Image re peaks like ice cream cones is good; omit the remark re snow vs ice cream--it's superfluous and besides ice cream is not on the peaks. I like the clever reason you came up with for his being called Twenty. Cheers. LIZ


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Hi Liz, Thanks so much for reading and the edit. I did think it not necessary and taking the focus from the mountain. Bless you, Kay.
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Nicely composed, Kay. When I lived in the California mountains we had many such rescues of people who chances with not only their own lives, but the rescue people's lives by doing foolish things.
There is a typo in the very first sentence, Kay:
"The Cock and Bull pub were (was) alive"
and then
"instead of icecream (ice cream) on peaks"
"Sleet turned to powdery snow as the group snaked their (its) way"
"Get outta here, or you'll be wearing peas all over your fathead (fat head)!"
Marilyn



 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thanks for reading and glad you liked. I saw the typos and will amend. Some of our grammar is different, not this one though. Our supermarkets have given pensioners one hour before the rush. Have to show our pension card, it's a start. A friend of mine decided to get me toilet paper...he husband picked up a roll of commercial paper (goes in machines) should last till Christmas. I don't know how I am going to get it off the roll which is as big as a life buoy!

reply by BeasPeas on 25-Mar-2020
    Hi Kay. Well I'm glad you got some. Many people would be envious of your enormous gift. We're all going through this situation together. We'll come out of it. :) Marilyn
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This is a terrific entry in the contest. You were very creative in giving a good explanation for the man's name. I like that the story is about helping people in trouble and the ending is a great referential one, as well. Best wishes in the contest, my friend. (Love the horse picture!) :-)


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    G'day Spangle, Yes the world is in a tangle. Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed. Bless you, Kay XX
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I was engaged from start to finish with your exciting story, Aussie. Your details and words create great imagery. Everything read naturally--even the name Twenty. Your picture does justice to the story, too. Thanks for sharing nd best wishes. Respectfully, Jan

Cock and Bull [ was ]
ice-cream--ice cream [in2nd paragraph ]


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    G'day mate! Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed. I will fix the typos! Love, Kay XX
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This was a great story, Kaye. It didn't sound fictional. I would say that is proof of a story well written. Man From Snowy River is one of my favorite movies. I also like Quigley Dow Under. I find Australian people to be delightful. Well done dear. Stay Safe! Nancy:)


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Hello Nancy, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Yes, we are a race laid back, welcoming and we stick together. Have to in these dark days. Are you OK? Love, Kay XX
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