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Home is where the heart is.

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Cindy Warren
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Home is where the love is. He did exactly what the nurse told him to do. Good for him. I work in health care, and I'm not sure separating people from their loved ones is the thing to do. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Cindy!
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Pam (respa)
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-This is very well written, George.
-Your descriptive phrase took
my initial idea, "Home is where
the heart is."
-You develop the story well
as the nurse addresses the husband.
-His responses are heartfelt-whatever
the condition of his wife, what does
it matter, his "home, i.e., heart is
with her. I would feel the same way.
-Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Pam!!

reply by Pam (respa) on 28-Mar-2020
    You are welcome.
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Hi George. You have an interesting story here. I like the way you narrate the main character's thinking. He was looking at the alternatives of what he is confronted with. I like you description of him considering what "home" would be like. Well Done

Good luck in the contest.

Robert


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
    Hi Robert,

    Thank you so much for the nice review! I'm glad you like it.

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 27-Mar-2020
    You're welcome.
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I like the sense of emptiness in the man.
Maybe "half-remembered" memories could be stated more smoothly: "sparsely recalled"? "sketchy details of"?

I'm a little confused at the end. DOES the man live at this facility with a little dementia? Or does he live elsewhere and decides to stay in the facility so that he won't be alone?

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 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
    Thanks for your review and suggestions.
    I honestly tried different ways of describing it, but I personally like half-remembered.

    As for the ending it can be interpreted in different ways. It could be that his wife is in that room and that his home is where his heart is with his wife.
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What a terribly sad episode, where the dear person is actually in the home of the bewildered, lost his wife and he himself sounds terribly lost. A first class entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Roy!
    Stay safe and bless you. :)

reply by royowen on 25-Mar-2020
    Well done
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Therese Caron
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What is sad and lovely poem. He knew that going home was no longer home. The hospital room his wife had been in was home. He headed directly for room 304, where he had spent a lot of time with his dying wife.This is a heartfelt, well written story. Best of luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thank you!!
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Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction contest.
This short story is well told and timely.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thank you!
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thaities, Rebecca V.
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You said much in just eighty words. The virus has everyone thinking of relationships, which is a good thing. People may even go back to using the telephone just to hear a loved one's voice once again, during the isolation times.


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thank you!
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I have heard of loved ones being called someone's home before, and you have illustrated it very well. I hope this flash fiction is fiction and that all is well with you!


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thank you!! :)
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Sally Law
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Fantastic flash, George. I would do the same. I am knit forever to my husband of almost 45 years. I had a dream similar to this the other night. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the flash.
Sally :))


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Sally! :)
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