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When Will I Be Loved?


contest entry /2nd Place Winner

  27 total reviews 
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Therese Caron
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This is a very sad and heartfelt poem. It's like a prayer, said by thousands of children every night who wish they belonged to a family. Beautifully written, perfect image chosen for your writing.


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
    Thank you for dropping by to read and review my presentation. Both much appreciated. Also, congratulations on your win. Respectfully, Jan
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This is a heart wrenching poem written from the POV of a child waiting, watching, hoping someone will come and love them, something we all deserve as innocent children to be loved and protected. Very nice Jan, cheers Valda


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Pearl, for your 6 star rating and great comments. Much appreciative of both. Respectfully, Jan
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Such a touching entry for the Family poem contest. I like that you chose an unusual approach to this contest rather than taking the easy way out. Thank you for addressing and calling attention to this sad plight of so many children. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
    Thank you for your great review and comments. Both greatly appreciated. I earned 2nd place in the contest. Respectfully, Jan
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This almost sounded like a nice country song. It flowed nicely. It was easy to read and I felt the writers pain. I want to console the writer and tell them it will happen in time. Good job!


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you for y our great review & comments. Both much appreciated. Respectfully, Anon
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The theme of this poem is really a sad one. A child waiting for a family to be loved.
The form is quite an amazing one with each stanza in full rhyme and an added line to each following. Well done! Best wishes!
Drew


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you for your detailed review of my entry. Much appreciated. Respectfully, Anon
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I imagine this is the prayer for all children who need and want a family of their own. You have portrayed the emotions extremely well. A family would be lucky to have such a child as the one saying this prayer. Meter and rhyme perfect, and beautiful presentation.


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Yvonne, for you exceptional 6 star rating and super review. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing & support. Respectfully, Anon
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This poem reminds us that there are those who have no family to call their own. It must be very hard to be an orphan and to feel that no one wants them. This poem is nice rhymed and flows well.


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you for reading & reviewing my presentation. Both mean much to me. I appreciate your time. Respectfully, Anon
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I'm all out of 6s, but this is so deserving. What a sad poem, we all feel that as the family grows up and moves on. To be alone is a tragedy that hurts. I do like this style, I've read a few now, and keep saying I'll write one. It fits well with the words you've composed, and it was all the more enjoyable because of it. Well done, and good luck in the contest. And, stay safe! :)) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you for your great review and comments on my presentation. Both mean much to me. Respectfully, Anon
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Beautiful! So many children out there who need a forever home. They wonder why no one wants them. What's wrong with them ? nothing!!1 There are some pretty great kids out there that would give anything to have some one to belong to them! Foster parenting is a rewarding experience. Love is always rewarding.
Patty


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thank you for reading & reviewing my presentation and for your insightful comments regarding adoption and fostering. All are appreciated. Respectfully, Anon
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I really feel for adopted children. Those who foster and/or adopt children must have such huge hearts.

Just one point: There are speech marks at the very end of your poem but none or anywhere else. Did you mean to put some at the beginning?


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Thankyou for dropping by to read and review my entry. Both much appreciated. The quotation starts with the word "One. Respectfully, Anon

reply by JudyE on 25-Mar-2020
    Sorry. I can see it clear as a bell now. And I thought I looked carefully too. :( Take care.

reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    (((Hug)))
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