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Eternity's Last Waltz


A free verse memory from 1962 when I was 21.

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This is exactly the poem that I needed to read after my long sabbatical from FanStory.

The free verse flows like the dance that you descriptively and creatively describe in this poem.

I love the movement, the era, and eagerness of this poem.

Thank you for the nostalgia. I hope you are safe and well.


 Comment Written 03-May-2020



reply by the author on 03-May-2020
    Many thanks for selecting this poem to review long after any value originally attached to it had wasted away. You are most generous bot with you words and your grading of the piece and I feel greatly honoured by this review.
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Hey
Well now a true mouthful of poetry complete with the wonderful ebb an glow and flood of hormones rampaging through the pituitary gland and into a wanton display of teenage mating dance.
Thanks for the Sunday waltz, though the end brought me up short like a scratch on a favorite 45.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    I have to say it was meant to bring the reader up short. I liked your simile though at my age it is the scratches on the 78s that I remember. Thank you so much for this review.
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Your memories serve you well in this free verse about this 'dancing queen' who still remains young, alive and vibrant in memories of probably more than one aging male LOL
Certainly don't miss the suspenders and stockings, but would have loved to have been able to dance like this one.
Great free verse,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
    Suspenders and stockings seem to be subject to a gender-based difference of opinion. I remember my contemporaries at that time refering to tights as 'passion killers! Many thanks for this review.

reply by Pearl Edwards on 03-Apr-2020
    Yes, because they didn't have to wear the suspenders and stockings LOL
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Greetings from NZ :) It was a lovely respite from lockdown-focus to read this poem. My parents are from your generation, so it was an inner peek into the youthful world they spoke of, and photographed. Excuse my tenses being ''up the wops", as my father has passed. I struggled reading the red on black text, but it was easier once enlarged. On further investigation, I read you settled on the choice because these were the colours she wore :) I love the bittersweet of this poem; true to life. I relished your original imagery ***sigh*** "confined sleep", "shell-like, ear"- beautiful and evocative. Ears have always reminded me of shells. Nice ears, at least. I like the French included and the Scottish "coronach" I am from relatively-mixed heritage, so this appeals to me. I appreciate also the universal theme of dance this poem conveys and the way you apply it to life, and death. Great author notes... although there is a wee typo there with décolletage...sorry, I don't know how to access an acute on my iPad. Thanks so much for sharing this poem. I enjoyed it.

Lise:)


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
    Sorry to hear of your father's passing and honoured that you should bother to review this at such a time, and with six stars as well. This part of FS is in HTML and the codes for all the accents etc. can be found at starr.net/is/type/htmlcodes.html
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Oh my God i felt goosebumps! I have no words to express how much I liked it, especially the closure, congratulations, that was excellent you are very talented


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
    Many thanks for this complimentary review. I am so pleased you liked it.
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Ah, of course, we could all be dead by now if we were remembered from back then. But some of us are still very much alive and kicking. As yourself, I may add, although I'm ten years younger. I loved your poem. Yes, it was daring times back then. Loved your poem. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
    Well I am still alive but you missed a lot of fun in those ten years. Never mind this will help you catch up. Thanks for reviewing.
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Wow! Takes one's breath away. No wonder you've hung onto it all these years. Quite an in-depth piece for a young man. Perfect picture to go with this.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
    Many thanks for this positive review. I wrote it for the last free verse class if you remember but the memory is genuine 1962. Are you going to join us for the rhyme class? Not that you need it but it won't be the same without you.

reply by damommy on 01-Apr-2020
    Thank you for the compliment. I might do it.
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This is vividly descriptive and powerful--nostalgia at its best and most appealing. The lines about the "shameless hussy" and the slobbering
bunch oh guys lustfully watching her made me smile.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
    Thank you for this review. I am glad the poem resonated with you.
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A very well-written free verse poem and a fond memory about a beautiful girl of many years ago and the last waltz you danced with her and now you don't know where she may be.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
    Yes indeed you have it all there. Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
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Hello Jim, well, this takes us back to another era that you very vividly describe in this well written free verse. 'bridged by blurred suspenders' LOL! Now that does takes me back. Well your memory has not dulled with time - don't know about the testosterone. I found the last part of your verse very sobering - God how time flies! A brilliant piece and I really enjoyed the read. Dorothy x


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
    Thanks so much for this six-star review. Sometimes those days feel like yesterday, sometimes they feel like another age.
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